Free verse № 137490
Unfortunate Lover
Unfortunate lover,
your arrival came late.
My winter approaches
and there's no time to wait.
Had you been fortunate,
sweet love of mine,
you would have loved me
in an earlier time.
It doesn't seem fair,
my youth never seen.
You should have been there,
to love me long, tan and lean.
Still you're unmindful,
as kisses land sweet,
upon deepened laugh lines
and tracks of crow's feet.
Winter can't be all bad
within your embrace;
your loving softens
time's signs on my face.
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Young teacher, the subject
Of schoolgirl fantasy
She wants him so badly
Knows what she wants to be
Inside her there's longing
This girl's an open page
Book marking she's so close now
This girl is half his age
Don't stand, don't stand so
Don't stand so close to me
Her friends are so jealous
You know how bad girls get
Sometimes it's not so easy
To be the teacher's pet
Temptation, frustration
So bad it makes him cry
Wet bus stop, she's waiting
His car is warm and dry
Don't stand, don't stand so
Don't stand so close to me
Loose talk in the classroom
To hurt they try and try
Strong words in the staffroom
The accusations fly
It's no use, he sees her
He starts to shake and cough
Just like the old man in
That book by Nabokov
Don't stand, don't stand so
Don't stand so close to me...
the last line in the 2nd stanza- You might consider continuing the metaphor of seasons representing ages, and instead of the adj. 'earlier' try 'spring'
or 'summer'etc...
The first line of the last stanza- This is a tiny thing but I think saying "won't" instead of "can't" sounds more certain, and that shows the woman in the poem accepting herself and the fact that this man loves her as is. Also in this stanza you mix tenses slightly. The 3rd line would reflect better on the 1st with 'your love will soften'
As for my younger self...no, she didn't have a clue :>)!
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