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ghost host

Member since 2005 · Posted 30 Dec 2005 · 13 comments

Running witless from the shadows and familiar images of you; hiding breathless, as my heart slows, wondering what I'll ever do you're lurking everyplace I go; you haunt me tirelessly. will I ever finally know how to flee your memory? closing eyes to your reflection, closing ears to siren's song, hasn't severed our connection, our yesterday's proved too strong. so many nights I've spent sleepless, keeping company with your ghost. the dawns are nearly countless when a dead man serves as host.

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[9] amanda_dcosta 30-Dec-05/9:57 AM Reply

A very descriptive and powerful presentation of poetry.

[8] hendrimike 30-Dec-05/10:20 AM Reply

so many nights i've spent sleepless,
keeping company with your ghost

sweet

[n/a] elderking › hendrimike 2-Jan-06/2:35 PM Reply

thank you!

[7] Dovina 30-Dec-05/1:15 PM Reply

Punctuation: drop the semicolon, period after "ever do." Otherwise good.

[n/a] elderking › Dovina 2-Jan-06/2:33 PM Reply

Thanks for your comments, Dovina. I admit punctuation and I aren't the best of friends.

[6] Niphredil 31-Dec-05/4:12 AM Reply

Good job. I don't really care for the title, though; it detracts from the rhyme in the last stanza.

[n/a] elderking › Niphredil 2-Jan-06/2:38 PM Reply

thanks and you're right about the title. I didn't put much thought into it.

[10] Prince of Void 31-Dec-05/10:58 AM Reply

ur poem has haunted my mind like a ghost ..good job

[n/a] elderking › Prince of Void 31-Dec-05/8:19 PM Reply

Thank you, Prince. I wrote it many years ago and it remained unfinished until the day I posted it here. The Ghost stop visiting too. Thanks for your comment and Happy New Year!

[9] amanda_dcosta 31-Dec-05/7:36 PM Reply

Happy New Year Elderking. May the new year bring you all that your heart desires..... except ghosts. (unless you really want them.) :-)

[n/a] elderking › amanda_dcosta 31-Dec-05/8:13 PM Reply

Right back at you, Amanda! As far as my "heart's desire"...he doesn't even have a clue yet...maybe the new year will bring me some courage to speak of it to him, ya think?? My ghost visits me seldom these days:>)

[8] deleted user 1-Jan-06/3:12 PM Reply

This is good. I like its rhythm--and the power of the last stanza.

[n/a] elderking › deleted user 2-Jan-06/2:41 PM Reply

Thanks, Paul S, I appreciate your comments.