Re: The ABC's Of Adultery by horus8	12-Dec-04/4:27 PM
the catalogue serves the perspective to perfection
Re: Work by poetandknowit	27-Nov-02/9:34 PM
Change your name to IFUCKINGSUCK. This reads like a pathetic proxy for a 2pac rap, mixed with some piss and shit you found lying in your stack of unpublished poems. If you pride yourself on this consider going through puberty, growing a pair, then writing about something that isn't bromidic. Oh, and get rid of the shit you use for fountain pens and the stale piss you use for ink. Thanks bitch, Love ErgoErgun
Re: Living Conditions by Christof	27-Nov-02/9:28 PM
This poem belongs in a nursery with other wreckless idiots who have no balls and spew shit from their mouths and asses whenever they see fit. This poem sucks. If you like it, you suck. Christof: grow some fucking balls before you to decide to piss in Microsoft Word, thanks.
Re: Volkswagon by ErgoErgun	28-Aug-02/3:12 AM
I enjoy your comments. What a wonderful relationship. =]
Re: Untitled by ErgoErgun	28-Aug-02/1:06 AM
Delightfuly tangy yet unrefined.
Re: Eleemosynary for the undeserving but forward foreigner by ErgoErgun	28-Aug-02/12:39 AM
No, piss on.
Re: White Lie by ErgoErgun	27-Aug-02/5:36 PM
Why?
Re: Jesus was a necromancer by horus8	24-Jul-02/6:04 PM
You're into theatre? Have you checked out any of Sondheim's musical productions? Oh, the poem... um... 6.
Re: Seasonal Memories by ErgoErgun	20-Jul-02/9:19 AM
My inspiration seems to come in a variety of forms, some of which, like this piece, seem more in tune with this audience's tastes. If you liked this poem I'd advise you to take at what I just submitted entitled "Volkswagon." Thanks for your comments, it's nice to see something uplifting against the negative dribble people usually proffer.
Re: Ethnic Smells by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	13-Jun-02/4:04 PM
I'll drink to that.
Re: fuck you by gsosville	3-Jun-02/9:31 AM
Masterpiece.
Re: Vigor Mortis by WarrenGDawg	16-May-02/9:30 AM
FUNNY AND PROVOCATIVE
Re: Jericho by goldfish	16-May-02/9:29 AM
It has no relation to Ozymandias. Seems Coleridge's Mariner rhyme scheme can be used very effectively. Great job.
Re: Ode to a Red Trashcan by nentwined	16-May-02/9:26 AM
Interesting tone.
Re: My Dark by crims0ngh0st	16-May-02/9:24 AM
Cut out the unecessary crap.
Re: Sloth and Expectation by ifni	16-May-02/9:23 AM
You could deliver such a profound idea in a more tasteful way.
Re: Nyctophobia by crims0ngh0st	13-May-02/12:22 AM
This is really rough. Polish it. Eliminate what you don't need and sanctify that which you do.
Re: Colloid by skaskowski	13-May-02/12:21 AM
Every word should have meaning to the integrity of the poem. "As it rains outside The drops are like tiny fragments of water Falling like objects that are dropped..." Telling me in a banal way what rain is isn't going to get you high marks. Remember to cut out everything that isn't needed, and say what is needed in the most beautiful way possible (that includes the obscene only when called for).
Re: q.e.d. by sunsolid	13-May-02/12:17 AM
Not bad bud. I like the math reference: Quod Erat Demonstradum
Re: geometry by skaskowski	13-May-02/12:16 AM
I like your meaning and parts of your imagery, but it could be made even more powerful. Extend the baby/killer dichotomy and tell me how that relates to innocence. Not bad though. =]