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Nyctophobia (Free verse) by crims0ngh0st I am afraid of the dark.
I am scared by the night.
It welcomes me,
It
consumes me.
The darkness counsels me'
The darkness knows me.
The
peaceful silence,
The boundless eternity,
I fear the comfort that
overwhelms me.
In the dark the power of the world lays at my feet.
The
thoughtless currents erase my sorrow.
Happiness floods over me and
leaves me fulfilled.
I am afraid of the compassion of the night.
The
gothic darkness that fits me.
The fundamental feeling of belonging in
the dark.
I fear I have found my home.
Up the ladder:
Wandering Spirit
Down the ladder:
clementines
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.2746377 Overall Rank: 13162 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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"Happiness floods over me" doesn't seem to quite say what I think you're wanting to say. Maybe "dark happiness", just to pound it in more, or... Not sure. I'd like to see more of why you fear the dark as opposed to that you are; what is wrong with having the power of the world, thoughtless currents, ...?
This is really rough. Polish it. Eliminate what you don't need and sanctify that which you do.
I fear that you have become some sort of gothic, nocturnal rodent.
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