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White Lie (Free verse) by ErgoErgun Exposition on the exposed only satisfies those who know
that life forces each to grow and stow
away the lies that make us vulnerable.
That's why the naked can walk in comfort,
comforted by the illusionary walls of their nudist colonies.
That's why one can die in ignorance,
bound by relative truths and false bliss.
That's why I can peer into absolute darkness,
and come away with truth.
You see, I'm one of the few who know not to know
that lies are a quick fix
and Hell can exist on earth if you solely believe in Heaven.
Up the ladder:
the rapier
Down the ladder:
#8
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Posted: May 10, 2002 4:52 AM PDT; Last modified: May 10, 2002 5:03 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8899 Overall Rank: 9905 Comments:
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anonymous @ 206.110.252.242
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16-May-02/4:38 PM
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Most of your poems suck but this one isn't bad. The last verse is best. Come up with more of it and I might (probably not) change my mind about you.
hmmm... and where did this idea come from?? just curious... EF
i like this, its nice, very truthful
xxx
Wow, in the name if Frass I want to be constructive to this, but it is tough. There is not a lot to work with. It sounds like a rap, which is, well, maybe, could be, some form of poetry, right? But the real problem with the poem is that is is way, way to didactic. And that is not good preacher man.
i hope that the point of this simply went over my head and that it isnt as bad as i think it is
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