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White Lie (Free verse) by ErgoErgun

Exposition on the exposed only satisfies those who know that life forces each to grow and stow away the lies that make us vulnerable. That's why the naked can walk in comfort, comforted by the illusionary walls of their nudist colonies. That's why one can die in ignorance, bound by relative truths and false bliss. That's why I can peer into absolute darkness, and come away with truth. You see, I'm one of the few who know not to know that lies are a quick fix and Hell can exist on earth if you solely believe in Heaven.

poetandknowit 23-Aug-02/8:55 PM
Wow, in the name if Frass I want to be constructive to this, but it is tough. There is not a lot to work with. It sounds like a rap, which is, well, maybe, could be, some form of poetry, right? But the real problem with the poem is that is is way, way to didactic. And that is not good preacher man.




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