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Living Conditions (Free verse) by Christof Dark October days,
When it seems the clouds
Have sucked the light into their cheeks,
Always feel like this:
The year's blind slope
Towards winter,
The burrowing mole
In its grope
Towards the warm womb
Of the earth,
The improbability of the sun
And our place in it.
Up the ladder:
Pilgrim
Down the ladder:
One Night
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Posted: October 25, 2002 6:40 AM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2002 6:40 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.756745 Overall Rank: 1802 Comments:
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200
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25-Oct-02/7:08 AM
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Blimey! Have you been reading Dylan Thomas? This is excellent. It sums up very well the autumnal weather, and you get in the absurdity of existence, a la Samuel Beckett. Top banana!
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> Nicholas Jones
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25-Oct-02/7:10 AM
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Well thank you, though I tend to steer clear of Dylan Thomas - and the Beckett reference is interesting. Glad you like it!
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200
> Christof
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25-Oct-02/7:14 AM
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On a totally unrelated note, I've just discovered the actress who plays the receptionist in The Office is also Hayley in The Archers. In my world, this is an exciting fact.
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> Nicholas Jones
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25-Oct-02/7:17 AM
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Did you know that she is also the daughter of Jasper Carrott? And that she ahd complete kidney failure a few years ago and now has a kidney donated by her mother? She's a fascinating young lady.
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200
> Christof
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25-Oct-02/7:20 AM
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I knew that her father was Jasper Carrott, but I didn't know about the kidney thing. I am slightly addicted to the Archers, which is very sad and somewhat worrying. Perhaps I need to write a poem about it. This week, I'm also baffled by the whole Ulrika Jonsson / John Leslie rape thing. If it's true, it means that when I used to watch Blue Peter as a kid, it was presented by a rapist.
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> Nicholas Jones
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25-Oct-02/7:23 AM
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Actually, that is worrying. I don't know whether I believe all that or not. It seems to have been revealed to the media in a very preplanned sort of way, with these other victims suddenly cropping up as if from nowhere. Weird. As for The Archers - haven't heard it for years. But it was always very comforting when I was at college.
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god'swife @ 209.179.212.72
> Christof
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25-Oct-02/7:36 AM
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Well considered 28% of women, and that's just women, surveyed in the States have been raped. It wouldn't be that far fetched. If he has any kind of clout, this is usually how it happens. One women gets up the nerve to tell and then all the other victims step forward. Not only is there the possibility of a program being hosted by a rapist, but hte fact is you work and eat and drink pints with them. Rape is not talked about enough. If you asked and got sincere answers you'd be shocked at the number of women you know who have been sexually abused. Boys too
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> god'swife
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25-Oct-02/7:41 AM
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It's a weird case - one TV personality, Ulrika Jonsson, writes her biography and says that at 19 she was raped by another TV presenter, who she refuses to name. The press leak the news that it is a guy called John leslie (which Jonsson neither confirms nor denies, as she says she isn't interested in retributiona nd just wants to egt on with her life) and suddenly about 10 women are saying that he raped them too. Knowing the English press, very little of any of this may be true, though there's the equal chance that it's all true. Either way, the guy's career has been destroyed even though he's never been charged with anything.
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180
> god'swife
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25-Oct-02/12:26 PM
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Haven't you seen aminals copulating on T.V? Rape is a natural, beautiful thing. Anyway, those 28% were probably lying. Probably thinking "Why won't anyone rape me? What's wrong with me? I'm nice, aren't I?"
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god'swife @ 209.179.135.38
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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25-Oct-02/12:38 PM
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Hmmm, well it's obvious noones forced their cock inside you. Rape is natural, I'll agree, but so is murder and theft. Some people fantasize about being raped, but the real thing is no fun. Just tell me were you live and I'll send over one of my henchmen, and then you can experience it first hand, or if you'd rather I'll send over two. One can fuck you in the ass while the other buggers your mouth. Would you like that? I bet you would.
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215
> god'swife
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25-Oct-02/1:04 PM
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If you're trying to make me see the error of my ways by presenting a "shocking" situation, it isn't working. I am not shocked, offended or intimidated by the idea of forced homosexual sex. Clearly I wouldn't enjoy it, but it's still natural and beautiful. P.S. My address is in my profile. P.P.S. You can't 'bugger' someone's mouth.
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god'swife @ 209.179.136.83
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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25-Oct-02/2:14 PM
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What's beautiful about being forced? Trying to make you see the errors of your ways? Give me a break, you are never wrong, we both know that. I was merely playing Abbott to your Costello. Jews on Second? The henchmen have been sent. Tell Rocco I said the checks in the mail. Why can't I bugger someones mouth?
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> god'swife
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28-Oct-02/3:38 AM
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Buggering is a specifically arse-related activity. Settle's suggestion scares me because I'm wondering which orifice is his entry point and which is the exit.
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god'swife @ 209.179.135.240
> Christof
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28-Oct-02/7:38 AM
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Alright then please tell me what's a good colloquialism for 'fucking someone's mouth'. I don't know of one, perhaps you do. I f you don't either than please make one up. Thank you in advance.
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> god'swife
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28-Oct-02/7:40 AM
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Frabbling. I'm going to frabble you. I'm going to give you a right good frabbling. Do you frabble on a first date? You motherfrabbler... I think that's quite good, actually.
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daniella @ 200.45.50.52
> Christof
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29-Oct-02/7:29 AM
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frabbling good.
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.97
> god'swife
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28-Oct-02/10:46 AM
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F = MA. THINK ABOUT THAT.
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-=SeTTle=- @ 140.186.49.160
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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25-Oct-02/9:12 PM
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You actually can 'bugger' someone's mouth. It takes some practice though - and you need a full running start.
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
> -=SeTTle=-
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27-Nov-02/9:47 PM
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ahahahhhaa!oweeeeeeeeeee. hold my hat, i'm first.
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==Doylum @ 213.122.52.24
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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29-Oct-02/3:38 AM
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you would enjoy it yer quender
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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27-Nov-02/9:44 PM
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funny, and right on all accounts...except for the part where you weren't enjoying it..
I love he ending it makes this poem meaningful. 'Blind slope' also wonderful.
-=Dark_Angel=- is going to have something to say about the third line, methinks...
Oh good grief, I'm sure you're right. You've just made me view that line very differently...
After reading this I'd think you've done some over the road work too. Another beauty. That's why I chose you for my mentor. I'm using a slow truck stop computer in Knoxville right now. God I wish I was home.9
After spending last weekend on the Yorkshire coastline the first 3 lines seem very pertinant. A good read.
very nice. :)
i would of liked more, but i guess autumn is about waning. huh? 6. liked the cheeky clouds by the way. carry on. tonights my last night as captain von trapp. i think that calls for some filipino hookers and some speedballs in the back of an rv moving at a good fourty-five mph. heading east with a well paid driver (a sober black madagascrian of course) how long would it take me to get to sioux city, south dakota? stopping to pee every hour on the hour, (from hollywood) and to buy some teriyaki beef jerky...that's a nasty riddle..the winner gets a lifetime supply of salt and vinegar lays potato chips. good day
Great!10
i know you are here, i can hear you breathing...
But very quietly. I like to be discreet.
This poem belongs in a nursery with other wreckless idiots who have no balls and spew shit from their mouths and asses whenever they see fit. This poem sucks. If you like it, you suck. Christof: grow some fucking balls before you to decide to piss in Microsoft Word, thanks.
Demonstrates a sure touch with language but I am just not sure it has worked as well as your other effort on which I have commented.
Liked the last two lines, not sure about the mole.7.
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