One Night

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 3 comments

They were everywhere my eyes could see, Glorious fields of endless pastures. Every color seen or unseen With rainbow meadows hidden by darkness. Beautiful how they swayed together With the breath of their Mother Nature. But more beautiful was what caught my eye. This lonely flower with sweet intentions. Glistened gestures lit up by starlight. Still and calm while the others swayed. Her full red petals longing for my touch. Uncontrollably drawn to the beauty, I walk to the flower and humbly kneel. Thorns massaging my hands I lift her up. Loving each second I'm in her presence She takes me home, my beauty, my Rose.

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[0] anonymous 9-Jun-01/10:29 PM Reply

pretty. it could use a bit more rhythm or less words per line for me, and it's a bit prosaic, but not horrible. :)

[0] anonymous 9-Sep-01/5:58 PM Reply

hauntingly beautiful...

[1] horus8 15-Jul-02/4:12 PM Reply

I regret to inform you Agent double odd eight, but due to tax cuts and terrorists we're gonna have to let you go. Bye. Bye.o