Free verse № 219
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As it rains outside
The drops are like tiny fragments of water
Falling like objects that are dropped...
Inside the house,
The fireplace crackles
With a sound like burning flakes of wood.
Inside my chest,
My heart beats
Like a routinely contracting muscle.
Outside my chest
The light bulb glares
Like a radiant object of luminousity.
Outside the house
The thunder echoes
Like a great booming of atmospheric origin.
Above the cloud
The moon still shines
Like an object reflecting sunlight.
Inside my brain
I feel a thought
Like a synapse firing an electric charge
And i hear the sound
of a car
Rolling away like an object on wheels...
11 comments
"As it rains outside
The drops are like tiny fragments of water
Falling like objects that are dropped..."
Telling me in a banal way what rain is isn't going to get you high marks. Remember to cut out everything that isn't needed, and say what is needed in the most beautiful way possible (that includes the obscene only when called for).
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