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Macaroni and Cheese (Free verse) by RosiePosie
Your breath your skin I'll dive right in to the Azure speckled menagerie Of time and the love that stretches wings Come here my friend- you're safe with me I'll love you-oh-incessantly with you're Crippled smile and fading heart let's Make this strong-let's never part When touching deep-dive deep your soul Abyss of bliss when its time for more Away with anxious worrying eyes Sleep deep my dear, fears a disguise Of black-this white-cannot demise But rather create within its bowl This rare jeweled love-unparalleled Sleep deep my friend-tomorrows here I'll be inside, a dripping tear stained-joy waiting for your sigh-oh let's away The journeys wheels are pulling up We'll begin again-yes fill my cup With the wine of your lips-your drunken smile Experience ecstasy within the mile.

Up the ladder: Colloid
Down the ladder: Up close, far away

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.964286
Weighted score: 4.964374
Overall Rank: 8511
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST
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Comments:
[0]... anonymous @ | 6-Jul-01/3:45 PM | Reply
"incessantly with you're" -- "your"; "its time for more" -- "it's"; "fears a disguise" -- "fear's"; "tomorrows here" -- "tomorrow's"; ... interesting, all in all; I could do with more punctuation showing how the poem was supposed to flow. I don't get "azure" with macaroni and cheese....?
[0]... anonymous @ | 7-Jul-01/1:21 AM | Reply
keep the title, throw away everything else.
[0]... anonymous @ | 10-May-02/5:42 PM | Reply
Good title, bad poem.
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