Re: You Can by Dariana	16-Oct-02/6:36 PM
'Climb every mountain...' This is a sappy, sappy musical lyric. It has been said before. I'll take 'Sound of Music's version, myself. Even if I don'T really like that musical.
Re: Thanksgiving Dream Sequence by Venus	16-Oct-02/6:37 PM
Hee hee.
Re: unlucky by rosiebailey	16-Oct-02/7:03 PM
This vaguely reminds me of an opposite version of Ogden Nash's 'Adventures of Isabel' (if that's what it's called, can't quite recall). Maybe it's the bear.
Re: Why Did God Do This To Me? by TripleHGurl	16-Oct-02/7:04 PM
Maybe he did it so you'd stop whining. Apparently it failed. I wonder what he'll find next...
Re: On the Swings by Christof	17-Oct-02/8:07 AM
Hee hee hee.
Re: First Kiss... by loneshadow29	17-Oct-02/8:45 PM
Very tritely put.
Re: FHjk by Dark Angle	17-Oct-02/8:50 PM
This is either sheer genius or sheer idiocy. I really can't decide which.
Re: casting couch by darby pyn	17-Oct-02/8:52 PM
This truly sounds as if you wrote a rhyming affair and then stuck it in a mass of enjambments so that either we wouldn't notice or if we did we'd think it was modern genius. Are you sure it wouldn't work better in the original line breaking?
Re: The ballad of woosie by rosiebailey	18-Oct-02/1:21 PM
Hmm, actually, the squirrel one is about the only one I don't like. This is seriously silly, which is good.
Re: purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey	18-Oct-02/1:24 PM
Margaret Thatcher as a rapper. That is the greatest thing done to her since they made her appear as Public Opinion in Offenbach's 'Orpheus in the Underworld'.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Oct-02/1:37 PM
Okay, let me see if I get this right: first two lines rhyme, 3&4 try but can only repeat the same word, and the rest give up. I strongly sugget eliminated hopes of rhyme in this affair.
Re: Angel by Mutant_X	18-Oct-02/1:38 PM
Did he have wings? Wouldn't that create an inbalance while dancing? Wouldn't you be afraid of tripping on them?
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Oct-02/1:39 PM
Two angels in a row. What have I done to deserve this? Why does no one ever seem to meet a nasty little imp?
Re: realities <from above their brilliance is short-lived> by royalflesh	18-Oct-02/1:43 PM
I'm assuming that's 'infinities, third stanza from the end line 1. His girlfriend should have a better name than mirrorgirl.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Oct-02/1:45 PM
'Snowflake in the sea' isn't bad, but 'candle lit at noon' is quite hackneyed.
Re: Dilemma of a Crip by Ninoy_Instigator	18-Oct-02/1:49 PM
'Towards Crips, people have anger' is tripe. Tripe tripe tripe tripe tripe. Now tripe, when well-cooked with salt, pepper, and a little oregano, can be good enough. In this case, it's raw. It doesn't fit the rest -- which isn't very good either. No feeling of dilemma whatsoever. Blah.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Oct-02/1:50 PM
'to make you feel you are the right'? 'I want nothing, just you' -- and a person is nothing? Your great love is nothing? How very flattering.
Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass	18-Oct-02/1:51 PM
The ending is bad. Perhaps he doesn't know. Perhaps your justice won't find him. And perhaps he doesn't hate anyone. It could always just be target practice. Or fun. Or something.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Oct-02/1:55 PM
Office of Prayers, Cloud Seven Heaven. October 18th, 2002. Dear Silver2002: We regret to inform you that your bid to escape from self-pity has been rejected, due to the fact that you already have caved in. The evidence is, of course, contained in your posted poems. We can do nothing to help you. Regretfully, Saint Anthony, (Spokesperson for God) Office of Prayers.
Re: You Can Count On Friends by Ojiboch	18-Oct-02/1:57 PM
Change it around, fer gawd's sake: make your best friend be fear. Then write a poem about that. It could even be amusing.