| Re: Do 20 always make this poem sense? by Prince of Void |
15-Jan-06/5:03 PM |
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To answer your title question, no. It would help to get the grammar right; but even then, I don't see that it makes sense.
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| Re: a comment on Racism 3 by Dovina |
15-Jan-06/2:30 PM |
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| Re: awakening by pollywolly |
15-Jan-06/2:11 PM |
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If it says what I think it might, it's a nice picture. Could you make it more clear, and say stand instead of stands?
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| Re: angst of the saints by calliope |
13-Jan-06/12:51 PM |
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It seems the last line should be, "i'm just as surprised as you when i reply."
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| Re: levity kiss by skaskowski |
13-Jan-06/12:49 PM |
I'm glad you explained that. But why not just let the first line be: Leviticus, levity kiss.
"singed with lipstick" is good.
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| Re: a comment on The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu |
13-Jan-06/11:49 AM |
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I see how that can be, but how many readers will even get through the unusual words in your large vocabulary to start thinking about an obsucre metaphor like that.
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| Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic |
12-Jan-06/6:35 PM |
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Yes, in the same way that Quantum Mechanics has turned switches in my brain. Granted, it's a long shot that such an all-inclusive theory will ever work well enough to gain wide acceptance among scientists.
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| Re: a comment on The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu |
12-Jan-06/6:31 PM |
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Could be, but martyrs don't usually have mischevious (deil's) smiles.
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| Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic |
12-Jan-06/6:04 PM |
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I know neither Hawking nor DA, but I do appreciate Gentleness, and know him well.
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| Re: The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu |
12-Jan-06/6:01 PM |
How does a smile become a martyr?
"craven deprications" Did you use a thesaurus for "cowardly blames"? Not that it matters, but simpler language goes down easier. Still, I like this.
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| Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic |
12-Jan-06/5:40 PM |
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I love Hawking because he is both intelligent and gentle in his presentatioin. "So God does play dice with the universe. All the evidence points to him being an inveterate gambler, who throws the dice on every possible occasion."
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| Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic |
12-Jan-06/9:37 AM |
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Hawling said that if someone could find a "theory of everything" which unites the currently divergent theories that describe various parts of the universe, then we would know the mind of God. I think he's right.
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| Re: a comment on What Matters by Dovina |
12-Jan-06/9:14 AM |
Bright-eyes-flanked-his-chin,
ten-der-smile-a-bove-his-nose.
I-knew-he-loved-me.
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| Re: a comment on the man with the red pendant by pollywolly |
11-Jan-06/2:13 PM |
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You were doing fine up to the conclusions in the last verse, which lack support or leading story.
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| Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo |
11-Jan-06/2:08 PM |
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I saw a flagman once who made a dance of the mundane. It's inspiring - the window washer and your poem.
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| Re: The Hermit on the Thoroughfare by http://mulberryfairy |
11-Jan-06/2:01 PM |
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Some commas needed. Using some, implies they're all there, but no, I think.
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| Re: Intestinal Splash by cyan9 |
11-Jan-06/1:54 PM |
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After that dream, I don't need to ask. You had a nice day.
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| Re: cat by Dental Panic |
11-Jan-06/1:49 PM |
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It would make a more news-worthy test if you were in that box instead of a cat. Now that would be dental panic.
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| Re: the man with the red pendant by pollywolly |
11-Jan-06/1:46 PM |
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Art interpretation carried too far.
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| Re: a comment on Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break by Nicholas Jones |
11-Jan-06/1:44 PM |
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Oh, but it is. Get used to it.
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