Re: The Deep End by drnick	18-Jan-06/11:11 AM
I love following someone whom I trust into danger. For better or worse, til death . . .etc. You've caught this well. Leave out "in" in Line 1.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	18-Jan-06/11:06 AM
I also like stanzas 1 and 3 better than 2 ansd 4. But is a Jerry Springer ending bad?
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	18-Jan-06/11:00 AM
I considered doing that, and I find plenty to complain about in this poem. I responded as I did because everyone who has commented seemed to be doing so out of curtesy to her and her grandmother. Either that or they really think the poetic structure of this poem is great.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	17-Jan-06/5:51 PM
Yes, I think I'll do the same. It's a hard decision - but yes.
Re: A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	17-Jan-06/5:39 PM
Amanda, I hate being the referee who calls an unpopular foul, but that’s how I feel. You have posted a poem, written in a time of sorrow, that you say you do not intend to edit and which you admit needs editing. I take the poem as heartfelt sentiment for a wonderful grandmother, and for that it is a good poem. But I think the “foul” comes when you post it on a site for voting and commenting, because there is little a commenter can say without sounding unsympathetic, and to vote low is show lack of sympathy for your feelings or lack of appreciation for your grandmother. Hope you understand.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	17-Jan-06/5:16 PM
Yes, there are many shades of potential meaning, all to be taken in the writer's time. I speculate on what Blake might have meant and see him thinking blacks and whites are of moreless equal value, an unpopular opinion in his time.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	17-Jan-06/3:50 PM
Blake has a good attitude for a time of slavery in England. I wonder why you left out the first verse: My mother bore me in the southern wild, And I am black, but oh! my soul is white. White as an angel is the English child, But I am black as if bereaved of light. In today's culture that can be taken in a negative way that Blake must not have meant.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	17-Jan-06/3:14 PM
so????
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	17-Jan-06/2:54 PM
"The sound of a kiss is not so loud as a cannon, but its echo lasts a great deal longer."
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	17-Jan-06/2:49 PM
That's a very general question to which I have no general answer. I dare say you know how to get what you want from a woman better than he does.
Re: Racism 4 by Dovina	17-Jan-06/2:31 PM
#1. http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=124271 #2. http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=136882 #3. http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=136963 To pre-answer the burning question, i.e., Why, other than for her usual inanity, does Dovina continue this dimtard (a passé word) series?: 1. Teaching myself how to be alone. 2. For the insult it delivers to the myriad tastefully correct exposés, with their race-is-nonexistent glitz, that clutter the internet. 3. To use the dross along Passé Road, whatever Popular Prudence drops, to make trinkets for sale on the sixties market.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	17-Jan-06/1:08 PM
My birthday is coming up. Could you migrate that lovely sentiment into a card with red roses, the velvet kind that fuzz up from the surface and feel clean-shaven to the cheek. And dark chocolate is quite appropriate.
Re: Where the Hell Did I Put My Glasses? by Joe-joe	17-Jan-06/1:07 PM
Fastened to a desk in an old unused trailer a pen and paper cup read like memoirs, bound there by concoction of sugar and ten-year-old coffee. Written by unsteady hands on an old keyboard, and rummaged files for lost reports, thumbed frantically the company phone listing - hands that no longer toil for an annual wage but steadily hold the daily tabloid at arms length. just a suggestion.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	17-Jan-06/11:57 AM
Yes, there you have it - good one, lol. Take the general lousiness of the world and return it as a gift: of ugliness and angst or sadness, but just perhaps, of beauty too.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	17-Jan-06/11:29 AM
Have you transmuted an experiential dross into gold as every professor of alchemy, on occasion, should?
Re: The Epitaph by vulcan	17-Jan-06/11:23 AM
The first three lines don't quite make sense. As it progresses, it gets better.
Re: Green things by ecargo	16-Jan-06/6:24 AM
I'd rather you did not delete the comments when you make a revision. If you make a major revision, like this one, it seems better to post it as a new poem. Better than the first.
Re: Reap by ecargo	16-Jan-06/6:10 AM
I see a rural harvest time in a hollow, but miss the point, if it's more than that.
Re: They Knew Me From Adam by D. $ Fontera	15-Jan-06/8:18 PM
When you use a twist on a cliche in your title, I expect to find some allusion to the cliche in the poem. I like the third verse.
Re: Whenever Forever Is by Enkidu	15-Jan-06/8:13 PM
This is good,but I think present tense would be better than dodging, drinking, ratioining, etc.