Re: Topper Fey by ALChemy	19-Jan-06/2:58 PM
Nicely done, and with such a good rhythm that the few lines that break cadence really stand out.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/2:34 PM
I agree that it’s better not to tell everyone what a poem is about with a title like Racism (and more scholarly too). It’s better to let them figure it out from the story. I did it this way on Poemranker to draw the series together and to build on No. 1. Your point is well taken.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/2:20 PM
Did you see my homepage explanation for Dovina?
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/2:05 PM
Okay, deep one, consider these racy racisms as variations on a theme – views from various temperaments. Or is there only The Temperment.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/1:59 PM
It would have worked with one gram :(
Re: Spinning, reeling by ecargo	19-Jan-06/1:43 PM
Rant on. This war is getting tedious and almost ridiculous even for we who supported it in the beginning.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/1:40 PM
Dovina's Day Off - 100%. (no, 14% actually)
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	19-Jan-06/10:26 AM
In Mt.14:26 and Mk.6:49, the word is Φάντασμα, phantasma, an appearance or apparition.
Re: What is it about brothers? by Tara57	19-Jan-06/9:51 AM
Overwritten. Try staying a little closer to reality.
Re: a week off by hendrimike	19-Jan-06/9:49 AM
"footprints left for years to come" enigmatically true.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/9:45 AM
Okay, nitpicking is better than name calling.
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	19-Jan-06/9:40 AM
When the Apostle Paul wrote about the Holy Ghost, he was using King James English and a 1620's dictionary, so you are absolutely correct.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	19-Jan-06/9:37 AM
When I hold a foundation, I believe it it. Like, "We hold these truths to be self-evident" A foundation can hold a person, or a person can hold a foundation as truth.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	18-Jan-06/6:41 PM
The first three could be reworded: We hold a sound foundation, and it's sad if we hold it for well-being, that God created man in His own image.
Re: Heirophant by cyan9	18-Jan-06/11:36 AM
How about "statuary" instead of "stationary" to give an added meaning?
Re: The funeral and the table by Caducus	18-Jan-06/11:33 AM
"Vicar rejoicing from the sound of his voice" is great, but "in" seems better. "Choking hypocrit" is telling us what has already been better shown.
Re: A flightless deer by Enkidu	18-Jan-06/11:27 AM
The repeats add little, I think. The idea is good, but needs refinement.
Re: Is Dying Ugly? by D. $ Fontera	18-Jan-06/11:22 AM
The concluding lines don't make sense.
Re: A comedian at nearly midnight by MacFrantic	18-Jan-06/11:20 AM
Good story, put the presentation needs work.
Re: Pain, I Curse Thee by woodstock20000	18-Jan-06/11:13 AM
I think you should tell us what kind of pain you are talking about.