Topper Fey

Member since 2005 · Posted 19 Jan 2006 · 7 comments

â¦and has my darlinâ sent for me? Oh Topper Fey, Oh Topper Fey. Iâve counted seven hundred and thirty three Long lonely days Iâve been away. If ya ever did see her youâd understand Why I need her back in my arms again. So gimme a hand my dear old friend. Oh Topper help me make it home. Thereâs a sound not far behind us Like the crack of a hundred whips. And somethingâs zippinâ by us One just nipped me in my hip Iâm loosinâ lots of blood and Iâm loosinâ my grip Oh Topper please help me make it home Tell me are we almost there Oh Topper, Topper Fey I feel like Iâm loosinâ air Is that chopper far away I canât feel nothinâ anywhere Hurry, hurry Topper Iâm gettinâ scared. Lord please spare me and answer my prayer Help Topper and me make it home. Now thank the lord above We finally made it to safe ground. Youâve carried me enough Dear friend Itâs time to lay me down Iâm afraid I couldnât make it and now Iâm heaven bound But donât fret Topper âcause Heavenâs just like home Topper my brother tell my darlinâ I love her. And make her yourâs so sheâs not alone.

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[9] Dovina 19-Jan-06/2:58 PM Reply

Nicely done, and with such a good rhythm that the few lines that break cadence really stand out.

[n/a] ALChemy › Dovina 19-Jan-06/3:08 PM Reply

Thanks D. Some of the lyrics I write seem so fused to the melody and rhythm that I'm willing to bet that if 5 people came to me and sang their version of the song that at least 3 of them would sing it almost exactly how I hear it in my head.

[9] cyan9 19-Jan-06/3:08 PM Reply

Like it, amusing and fun. verse with Now thank the lord above stood out a little too much for my likings, too much of a change of rythm, or maybe the wrong sort of change

[n/a] ALChemy › cyan9 19-Jan-06/3:24 PM Reply

I've had this poem lying around for quite a while so it's hard for me to notice what you're pointing out but I do remember that in that stanza the rhythm and melody slowed down to bring in the closing lines. I think the "Now" is what causes the stanza to slow down slightly.

[8] AngelicVampiress 23-Jan-06/8:06 AM Reply

*8* =)

[9] amanda_dcosta 24-Jan-06/12:57 AM Reply

Al, isn't it supposed to spell Fay rather than Fey? Or is this unconnected to Oh Merry Fay.

This piece is pretty good, though i should agree with cyan9 that towards the end it does stand out a bit.

Also, punctuating the end of each verse might be needed.

[n/a] ALChemy › amanda_dcosta 24-Jan-06/1:21 AM Reply

Topper was written first. I don't know, maybe I decided to change the spelling to designate a male and female version of the name like they do in spanish. It's connected. They're both about love and war.
It's a lyric so I guess you really need to pick a melody an fit the words into it the best you can but I'll see what I can do about the end.