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Topper Fey (Lyric) by ALChemy

…and has my darlin’ sent for me? Oh Topper Fey, Oh Topper Fey. I’ve counted seven hundred and thirty three Long lonely days I’ve been away. If ya ever did see her you’d understand Why I need her back in my arms again. So gimme a hand my dear old friend. Oh Topper help me make it home. There’s a sound not far behind us Like the crack of a hundred whips. And something’s zippin’ by us One just nipped me in my hip I’m loosin’ lots of blood and I’m loosin’ my grip Oh Topper please help me make it home Tell me are we almost there Oh Topper, Topper Fey I feel like I’m loosin’ air Is that chopper far away I can’t feel nothin’ anywhere Hurry, hurry Topper I’m gettin’ scared. Lord please spare me and answer my prayer Help Topper and me make it home. Now thank the lord above We finally made it to safe ground. You’ve carried me enough Dear friend It’s time to lay me down I’m afraid I couldn’t make it and now I’m heaven bound But don’t fret Topper ‘cause Heaven’s just like home Topper my brother tell my darlin’ I love her. And make her your’s so she’s not alone.

ALChemy 19-Jan-06/3:24 PM
I've had this poem lying around for quite a while so it's hard for me to notice what you're pointing out but I do remember that in that stanza the rhythm and melody slowed down to bring in the closing lines. I think the "Now" is what causes the stanza to slow down slightly.




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