regarding some deleted poem...	17-Feb-05/4:41 PM
Perhaps your best. At least I get it and think I might have lived it. Some folks don't want to see anything but their paintings.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Feb-05/9:33 PM
I'm not laughing because loving onesself is an essential prerequisite to loving another. I'm convinced of it. Few poets could say it as well.
Re: If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	18-Feb-05/8:55 AM
You are asking whether this stuff would happen if God has an opinion on whether it happens. It's like asking if God has any control, and implying He does not.
Re: The Critical and His Horse by MacFrantic	18-Feb-05/5:10 PM
sad
Re: For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco	19-Feb-05/6:32 AM
No, I couldn't stay mad. It's a pretty good poem no matter how old you are. It had more to do with some unrelated baloney. I hope you’ve got sunny days wherever you are.
Re: Rusty knife to the kidney by INTRANSIT	19-Feb-05/6:36 AM
Wow, bet he never fixates again. Comes from the Bible story about woman made from the rib of man. Had to laugh, hope you meant it funny.
Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry	19-Feb-05/10:16 AM
The first verse is great, but what happens next? Misspelling and misgrammar to be sure, but what are you saying?
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Feb-05/10:49 AM
The stomach lining of the anaconda that just swallowed you?
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Feb-05/8:13 PM
Somewhat repeatative, but nice
Re: On the Lawn by bamf909	19-Feb-05/8:17 PM
Poemranker has been down most of the afternoon and evening. That seems to happen quite often, and in your case explains the lack of initial commentary. Wow, walking out in bare feet on frozen grass just to kiss her. That's great and nicely written. "convalescence" seems strange, try "red and green fuse to one." Welcome aboard.
Re: He tells me to imagine... by RION12	19-Feb-05/8:22 PM
Said too plainly. Try for imaginative ways to say it.
Re: ~RePOST~Cupid's Arrow <----<< by nothingtoanyone	20-Feb-05/7:01 AM
We all know this is not a Shakespearian style poem. You used a few old English words for some reason, which zodiac picked-up on to ridicule you. It’s what he does – finds some insignificant aspect of your poem to bash, while ignoring the thrust of what you’re trying to communicate. If you are showing us cupid’s sting, as the title suggests, then the arrow has missed its mark, at least to my understanding. Start with getting the spelling and grammar so they say what you mean – “northern” “breathe a breath” “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” After fixing these, look at the things you are saying too many times. “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” could be simply “wherefore is the desire” and “breathe a breath, a breath of blood” could be “breathe a breath of blood.” Then look at your images and metaphors. Does “moss-ridden mule” say what you want to say? I think this has potential for a good poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Feb-05/8:24 PM
This starts as a beautifully written nature poem, with the freshness of a new convert, but it sinks as nature does to its beginnings. I think you need a long stroll in the rose and camellia gardens of the Huntington Library. I hear they’re lovely this time of year.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Feb-05/7:47 AM
Are you trying to prove that your poetry sucks. To what lengths will you go to avoid kuddos?
Re: The Plane of War by MacFrantic	21-Feb-05/7:52 AM
War is bad. We know that, and unless a poem presents something unusual about it, the thing falls flat.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Feb-05/3:23 PM
Nonsense, and the spacing's bad
Re: Boiled by INTRANSIT	22-Feb-05/2:38 PM
Boiled? But weren't those days in the valley sweet. Until the eruption, the realization of lies. Still it was sweet. Volcanic ash'll do that to an artichoke, as lies to a heart, but hey, shake off that ash, bloom, a little grayly maybe.
Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	22-Feb-05/2:42 PM
"layed" in the first line. And I think what we go through for a hunk is more than a hunk goes through to get layed.
Re: It's a Mammal, Stupid! by D. $ Fontera	22-Feb-05/2:44 PM
No excuse. You start well.
Re: Pennies by woodstock20000	22-Feb-05/2:47 PM
Scratch the last line. The first 5 lines seem bulky, wordy.