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Rusty knife to the kidney (Free verse) by INTRANSIT She asked him
what the color of her eyes were.
He said "Aren't they usually red?"
Her reply?
"Heres your engagement ring,
and your rib."
Up the ladder:
Damned No More
Down the ladder:
Like A Rainbow
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Posted: February 19, 2005 5:46 AM PST; Last modified: March 20, 2005 4:29 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6712 Comments:
I liked it better before, but still good.
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Or would he laugh at it.
To clarify: Take the sentence above. Do I seem to have felt something? Yes, of course. I felt sorry. Did I find a unique way of expressing it? Yes. I intentionally spelled poetry in an odd kind of quaint way. Does it let you feel something too? If there's any reason to the universe, yes. Put-off, indignant, or somewhat justified in whatever preconceived notions you're harboring about my personality or procreative abilities, probably.
Maybe you mean, The POET seems to feel something and finds a unique way blah blah blah. Is this a poem because INTRANSIT, a poet, wrote it? Not in any kind of universe I want to exist in!