Re: The Runaway by bamf909	22-Feb-05/8:07 PM
Yep. Done that. Not bad atol.
Re: dot.com by PodPoet	23-Feb-05/6:55 AM
Must you keep recycling this just to get it on top of the Recent List?
Re: My word, her word, and yours by thepinkbunnyofdoom	24-Feb-05/8:19 AM
These coded interactions are interesting for riddle and bravery to risk discovery. Among the angst though are a few good lines - "Fact wrapped around fiction" because it's the opposite of the usual fiction wrapped around fact.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Feb-05/8:23 AM
The last three lines blow it. How could you feel everything she does?
Re: The End of the Affair by jessicazee	24-Feb-05/8:34 AM
Scratch the first line. Line break after "teeth." I like this a lot!
Re: Invisible Wounds by Fearlesfan_04	24-Feb-05/8:36 AM
Okay you have wounds, but that's about all it says. Fancy spacing and repetition cannot make it better.
Re: They that do not scream by INTRANSIT	24-Feb-05/1:04 PM
Yeah, good point. Ignore the screaming malcontents with their petty little gripes and open the window for the mantis.
Re: Untitled by MacFrantic	25-Feb-05/6:59 AM
Line 2: sayest is singular, they plural. Line 3: use "thee" to stay with the old English. Line 4: the beat is off. Try morn delays. That's as far as I got. You've got the old (yawn)English voice alright.
Re: Last Time by DevilBuni	26-Feb-05/6:58 AM
You must forgive INTRANSIT. He drives long hours in a semi on coffee. Don't get me wrong, his suggestions are good, and you'd do well to pay attention. But overall, you've got a good theme here.
Re: As The Days Turn to Months by DevilBuni	26-Feb-05/5:24 PM
The first 2 verses say it all and pretty well. Consider dropping the last.
Re: Homecoming Parade by wilco	27-Feb-05/6:05 AM
Thought provoking. I can hear it with an acoustic guitar from a coffee house stool. Not bad.
Re: How Do I Become a Poet? (with John B. Benitez) by Vince Dolamando	27-Feb-05/6:25 AM
Poetry is something you read after you have written it and eliminated the obvious mistakes. It's a fine point I know, but try to master it.
Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli	27-Feb-05/6:31 AM
Very funny and nicely done. It makes me laugh at myself. Welcome to Poemranker.
Re: For Junior by PodPoet	1-Mar-05/7:46 AM
Beware!
Re: In My Arms by jroday	1-Mar-05/9:03 AM
Drop the first line, since it's the same as the title, and change "mine" to "mind" in Line 3. Also, some of the punctuation is not needed. Otherwise pretty good.
Re: spiders and butterflies by Mona Lisa	1-Mar-05/12:03 PM
The last verse seems overdone, otherwise pretty good.
Re: We Have Nothing to Talk About by jessicazee	3-Mar-05/6:57 AM
Good. I think you could make it stronger by cutting a few words - "trance" - 3 adjectives in a row. And a line break after "secrets." "so" in line 7
Re: A Time by DevilBuni	3-Mar-05/6:59 AM
I agree. Verse 4 has potential - could become the poem.
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	3-Mar-05/7:06 AM
I like the audiance sarcasm in the first verse - a funny twist.
Re: Woman on the Stairs by James Rykelangeli	4-Mar-05/7:44 AM
Rich with language. Although it evokes grand visions of the night, I look for meaning and shall perhaps look again.