| Re: Intersection by D. $ Fontera |
1-Aug-05/8:45 AM |
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If we all followed your advice in the first verse, we'd do better. Good;
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1-Aug-05/8:47 AM |
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This is very funny and trqgic. I've tolerated people like this. It's beyond pathetic. Good.
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| Re: Thoughts by drnick |
1-Aug-05/8:50 AM |
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The first verse is good; I hoped you would develop that theme. Instead, you contrqdict yourself.
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| Re: writers block by Jesus' Pedometer |
2-Aug-05/7:59 AM |
"To wonder of my pedigree"??? Have you nothing more worth wondering about?
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| Re: Forgiveness by Niphredil |
2-Aug-05/8:12 AM |
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Strange how an act done in seeming rightness turns sour. Most people never forgive. They either go on pretending or they leave.
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| Re: SO LONG MY BELOVED by prettyktm |
2-Aug-05/8:14 AM |
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Spelling errors abound, but mostly you need to refine what you want to say.
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| Re: Floss by jauser |
2-Aug-05/8:16 AM |
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Figure out what you want to say. Then say exactly that.
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| Re: War by zodiac |
3-Aug-05/7:53 AM |
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Lives saved for some use which you can't understand and despise as useless. Why call her Girlie, as if she has only flippant wants?
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3-Aug-05/7:55 AM |
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| Re: Ain,t Life Fuckin Great,(part2 The Stone Man) by Bethy |
5-Aug-05/1:46 PM |
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A sad sentiment. It would be nice if the rhyming structure of the first verse could be continued in all verses, but it's better not to force it.
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| Re: Coffee Incorrectly by gregsamsa222 |
5-Aug-05/1:49 PM |
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I like this, but have trouble with the adverb following the noun in the title and in the theme.
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| Re: A Night at the Move-ies by Crann Mascher |
5-Aug-05/1:56 PM |
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Makes a gal wonder, how many guygals do I see in the lady's room.
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| Re: Mavis Beacon, Human. by Crann Mascher |
5-Aug-05/2:03 PM |
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I like this a lot. Is the long quote yours?
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| Re: Pilfered Pancakes, Broken Trust by Crann Mascher |
5-Aug-05/2:10 PM |
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Except for "boomed boomingly," flumpet, and the last line, an enjoyed and novel read.
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| Re: Disregard the first line of this poem by T. Jonathron Remp |
5-Aug-05/3:39 PM |
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Your last line describes most poems.
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| Re: Iâd Kill Your Dog For Respect by Crann Mascher |
5-Aug-05/3:46 PM |
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| Re: Mr. Unremarkable: Circumstance #1 by MacFrantic |
5-Aug-05/3:49 PM |
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Mark Abel works out as expected, but the other Mark - who is he?
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| Re: TV Date by the_poetess |
5-Aug-05/4:40 PM |
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Good except for some misspellings.
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| Re: Sorry by XOXScottishgrlXOX |
5-Aug-05/4:42 PM |
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I think you are undecided on exactly what it is you want to say to him.
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| Re: first poem of the new year by that_funny_girl |
5-Aug-05/4:45 PM |
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A "rambling reflection of thoughts" is how a poem can start.
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