Re: Him by hobojo	23-Jan-08/2:03 PM
Can you introduce us? I want to meet him.
Re: Voice of the World by Dovina	27-Jan-08/2:55 PM
Beginning a new thread like a charismatic renewal of an old religion, this is an answer to atheists, a declaration of victory in the battle between enlightened secularism and Christianity. Or stated with recognition of human frailty, as Jesus taught to state, I preface anything I say with realization that Betelgeuse is 800 times the sun’s diameter and is so far away that nobody living today will see it, but only its light sent hundreds of years ago. And though it is unimaginably big and far, much greater things were flung by someone (Oh, sorry, that presumes too much.) My mistake, of course, is inferring God from science, instead of not-god from science. Now where were we? Oh yes, we were relating morality and religion. Or stated another way, we were relating principles that hold society in harmony, with ideas about God. They seem unrelated to me, but I find it interesting that most religions hold the same morals in regard to stealing, killing, fraud, and the like. Religions differ on morals about the eating of bats, the covering of women’s faces, and the killing of insects. The first set of morals derives from polite society’s needs, and work just fine either couched in dogma or without religion. The second begin with writings and cleric’s decrees. Just because these “morals” get stuck into religion does not make them part of true religion. What could the eating of bats have to do with recognition of God? Jesus made this point clear, as anyone can see from reading him apart from later writings of his church. Christianity is about Christ (duh) not about superseded Old Testament texts or something a monk wrote in the fourteenth century. In summary: don’t get me started.
Re: Should have a world record by alvinb	6-Feb-08/4:06 PM
Do you really think your tears and your heartaches are greater than any others? "Do not be surprised at the painful trial you are suffering, as though something strange were happening to you." I Pet 4
Re: Empty Eyes by Rachelle Egan	6-Feb-08/4:07 PM
The rhymes are forced. Rwanda deserves better.
Re: Nameless Stranger (a rensaku) by gunsaku	6-Feb-08/4:12 PM
good except penultimate stanza. Adding supernatural is a disappointment. First 5 verses are best.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Feb-08/4:18 PM
Yes, a good statement, not too didactic. Not bad. Can lose "as a sack" I think "ugly" can go too Line 4: "a young . . "
Re: Sleep *edited by hobojo	15-Feb-08/3:22 PM
emits sound
Re: Lost by alvinb	15-Feb-08/3:24 PM
added - grammar
Re: The Things We Wear by jessicazee	11-Mar-08/3:32 PM
"red rain dress" is a wonderment, maybe like me, you just walk a lot and get wet. "worm elastic" is cute. That hat wont help against rain. S4 is strange, and strangely punctuated. S5 pulls it together, except the tag is again, strange.
Re: Light show by winniss	11-Mar-08/3:34 PM
ok, nice rhythm, ok rhyme. What's the point?
Re: in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	27-Jun-08/10:39 AM
If an engine won't run, inject some of your own blood into its carburetor. Good try. I think the resumption of SEARCH would make a better try. As for anti-grav and VTOL, they look like results of the same technology. I don't know what FTL is. The last line is funny
Re: I Got Mine Designed by Skamper	27-Jun-08/10:46 AM
At least you're back and ranting erotically. I wish more were. "de-frost" is like putting Frost down. Hopefully you don't mean to; why not "defrost"?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jun-08/10:51 AM
period after slogans, else the last line has wrong meaning. I get a few bites to chew on here from a beast I cannot identify.
Re: The sky ending up by Prince of Void	27-Jun-08/11:18 AM
Pessimists have the advantage of seldom becoming discouraged by a bad happening. Enjoy unhappiness, it seems quite comforting. I think you can make this more unhappy be cutting the "in"s in lines 6 and 7 and other such words that don't depress.
Re: Almost Alone by sliver	23-Jul-08/4:21 PM
Becoming more like willow than oak is very Dao and very cool. Verse 2 displays drunkenness; please proofread. Verse 5 is a thing I learned 20 years ago. But Verse 6 blows it. The final verse is a disappointment to a good poem. Goals should always be subject to change.
Re: Magazine Promotion by nentwined	23-Jul-08/4:27 PM
Where the heck is GUD anyway? I liked 20% of it and that's a lot. Be like Homer, I say, write for absolutely no reason at all and try to sell nothing.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-08/12:32 PM
Poor disabled slob. Have a sucker
Re: Smelly Scum Child. by Y2kSlamPoet	2-Aug-08/12:36 PM
No prophet, just a jerk, telling lies.
Re: A List of Names Worth Listing by SupremeDreamer	2-Aug-08/12:45 PM
I am honored, thank you
Re: Warlord by INTRANSIT	14-Aug-08/3:51 PM
Funny, the greener pasture and all that bovine fantasy. loved America / Loathed America - perfect.