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Light show (Free verse) by winniss To the light, the people go.
Masquerading for a show.
Turn the light out, watch them go.
Back to people they don't know.
Up the ladder:
Wash away my life
Down the ladder:
I said no salt!
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Posted: February 27, 2008 6:03 PM PST; Last modified: March 9, 2008 6:59 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.023713 Overall Rank: 7476 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.22.108.229
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11-Mar-08/3:34 PM
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ok, nice rhythm, ok rhyme. What's the point?
there could be something good here, maybe a couple more stanzas would help to flush it out.
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