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Lost (Free verse) by alvinb My heart seems not to beat
My body is without heat
A love, once a myth
Is lost inside this broken zenith
My soul full of sadness
My spirit out of madness
Then you came and add the numbness
I recall pain from your kisses
Up the ladder:
I said no salt!
Down the ladder:
Smoke Me
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Posted: January 31, 2008 7:52 PM PST; Last modified: February 11, 2008 10:13 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.023713 Overall Rank: 7475 Comments:
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2-Feb-08/9:49 AM
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You need to proofread this. My vote would have been higher if you had'nt voted for yourself.
added - grammar
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