Re: The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom	23-Jul-04/2:52 PM
I thought You wanted to rise above this sort of wallow. And going back this far to take another dip. Disgusting.
Re: the secret language of clouds by fair12	23-Jul-04/3:04 PM
Some good lines here and a good thought. I'd cull a few words - "though" in line 5, "over" in verse 4, speech
Re: Flying things by INTRANSIT	23-Jul-04/3:11 PM
Try "fight" in line 9
Re: Dan by dougsoderstrom	23-Jul-04/6:49 PM
Now this is good, provocative. I like Dan, whom I didn't, but do, in spite of his shoe.
Re: A Mothers Heart by TAMARAG67	23-Jul-04/6:52 PM
Good thought, but too cliche. Could use some banter between baby and adult.
Re: Hidden by QuirkyWonder	24-Jul-04/2:28 PM
I there are also other explanations, but I'll accept yours.
Re: Bad animal limericks by INTRANSIT	24-Jul-04/4:14 PM
Technically terapin burgers. Funny.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Jul-04/7:56 AM
Everything is not the same, and that's what makes it work in two ways. It may be that not much has changed or it may be that a lot has changed. I can read both and like to ponder both.
Re: Dirty Heaven by SupremeDreamer	25-Jul-04/1:39 PM
Good rant, if a bit long. May Breaonna make it to Pasadena and JJ's where she can get dinner and drink for three bucks.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-04/11:11 AM
Funny, good analogy, just a glass of wine and a room for the night, flush the rest.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-04/11:24 AM
Nice
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-04/12:31 PM
What does it say about God if he gives a thing that curses? The line seems out of place in a an otherwise good poem.
Re: Wake Up by unouluvme	27-Jul-04/12:33 PM
Wish I knew what your are talking about. It sounds like it might be interseting.
Re: Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT	27-Jul-04/12:47 PM
The carbon dating thing throws me because it dates dead tissue, which is ok except that I wonder why you bring it up, except to compare it with what he was about to say regarding the stars. Otherwise a good read.
Re: Barflies and Bombshells by wilco	28-Jul-04/10:52 AM
May it never drop, if not from this barfly, then some other. Cheers
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jul-04/11:03 AM
Or she knows when not to wear white, maybe never. Seems too many seasons to end first.
Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus	28-Jul-04/11:06 AM
I like enough shrouding to let me draw my own conclisions, but I don't like riddles, and this reads like a riddle.
Re: Perfection by lilshorrtee	29-Jul-04/11:09 AM
Pleas check spelling and grammar before submitting. Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Jul-04/11:13 AM
"wanting me fully" sounds presumptious. Maybe because "I refuse to concentrate."
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Jul-04/11:20 AM
The last line is a twist of uncertainty. The rest works.