regarding some deleted poem...	29-Jul-04/11:27 AM
I'd rather you said what you expect tomorrow to bring, but still it's a common feeling and therefore the stuff of poems.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jul-04/7:17 PM
It seems a few mere strings to undo in theory and a few folds to flatten in what time and space you had available would have been no problem for one so adept in grammar. Oh well.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jul-04/7:28 PM
Silk usually comes without lace and vice versa, but okay not always. What I really can't buy is not kicking off the high heels before going to sleep. Maybe you should try wearing them awhile and then see if the last line really works. Otherwise good.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-04/10:28 AM
Like the beat poets of the fifties with their agendas. It's hard to wade that boring political stuff.
Re: You Can't Kill A Dead Man! by dougsoderstrom	31-Jul-04/10:30 AM
Not a new thought, but a good one. Not really a haiku either, but a good way to live.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-04/12:16 PM
This is so so sad, it must be a satire on so so sad. Assuming that it is, I'm giving a 9, not the 0 it would be otherwise.
Re: The wispears of the night by XxRuby_KillsXx	31-Jul-04/12:54 PM
Please check spelling before submitting. Thank you.
Re: I'M STILL IN LOVE WITH YOU by massangel62	31-Jul-04/1:19 PM
"tears Flowed like a river bed"??? Riverbeds don't flow, and most of the other analogies don't work either. they seem only there for the rhymes.
Re: The Chaos by Prince of Void	31-Jul-04/2:07 PM
A good idea, but not strongly presented. I'd like to see the ending be more definitive. I became a mystic They are just consumers Led me to find myself Trying to keep the decaying day away As the people become more hollow
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-04/4:05 PM
At least you INSIPID even your own. But I don't find it lifeless or dull, though Doctor Smellygood is a bit weird.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-04/7:45 PM
While it's not your usual mood, it's been my mood at times. Reading something I'd be afraid to post is therapy. Thanks.
Re: The Conception of a Dream by wilco	31-Jul-04/7:52 PM
I've read this three times and it's still perplexing. First, I see so much variety that "Startlingly similar are the plains From one coast to the other" throws me. And why would the the goal of the wasted and youthful be to quiet these thoughts? Then comes a line I relate to and like: "to keep them in the forefront is the curse of the aged and foolish." The last verse I try to relate to the title and end up only vaguely able. Maybe it's supposed to be vague and dreamy.
Re: Cold Ones by gayguy2005	1-Aug-04/2:31 PM
I think it would be stronger if some lines were omitted. Try leaving these out: Your in command, no longer theirs, are yours for your delights, yours are the only ones you hear, no complaints on how you good you are, its like your the only one here,
Re: Meditations on a Human Skeleton in a Museum by Sasha	1-Aug-04/3:36 PM
A good thoughtful ramble. Line 1, do you mean "your teeth"? Might want to reconsider, "Whose money runs your immortality?" It throws in a new thought, maybe not needed. And if it's a sonnet, might want to reconsider the indentation and line break.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-04/7:01 PM
I believe it is spelled keeriste, making the "i" long. Otherwise it sounds like keerispy cream or something. She's forgotten the tale of the cross for sure. Good analogy.
Re: A poem crafted from the depths of my heart by capachijim	1-Aug-04/7:29 PM
Splendid!
Re: Mushroom Potion #9 by <{Baba^Yaga}>	2-Aug-04/11:19 AM
Sounds like you believe in darn near everything. I like the cadance, except for the last verse, which I wonder why you include.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-04/11:28 AM
I bet it sounds great read aloud. The spacing helps to give it voice.
Re: two by unknown^user	2-Aug-04/11:38 AM
A nicely crafted picture. Line breaks at the changes of scene seem appropriate. No period after "But if he is still the man." The title is not exactly a butler inviting me into the parlor.
Re: A FIRST POEM FOR MY GRANDCHILd by massangel62	2-Aug-04/11:43 AM
A nice sentiment and appreciated I am sure by the ones it is for, but a bit too simplistic for posting here. You will probably not appreciate the response.