regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-04/11:59 AM
Good thought about Mona and Leo. she really does look stifled. Nice
Re: I miss you still by beck2457	2-Aug-04/12:46 PM
I-miss-you poems are very common. They can be good if free from the usual cliches and having something more than the usual that this has.
Re: May Monday Explanation by MacFrantic	2-Aug-04/1:50 PM
The first 5 lines are good. Could end it right there.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-04/8:01 PM
Very funny. Most of you want to give, or rather lend, other parts. How selfish we are to want it all, or just a heart.
Re: I Love You Mildred Rogers No Matter What by cat	2-Aug-04/8:03 PM
Could be said more effectively in half the words.
Re: Innocence by QuirkyWonder	3-Aug-04/10:28 AM
"waiting to be wished upon." Cute.
Re: Harvester of Sorrow by frdup717	3-Aug-04/10:30 AM
-=Dark_Angel=- with or without P.I. embodied.
Re: He Will Be Loved by eyrbare	3-Aug-04/10:38 AM
I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.
Re: nice day by New Life Drug	3-Aug-04/10:42 AM
Quite good, really, except for the last line, which because I'm accused of being a prude, I will say doesn't fit here.
Re: May I? by cedand1	3-Aug-04/10:49 AM
I suppose if I did not relate to this in my own experience I would pass it off as another ramble by another crazy poet. But since I do, it's enlightening.
Re: My two cents by hobojo	3-Aug-04/10:54 AM
This is good, but what are Cylindrical Errs? The last verse seems superfluous.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Aug-04/10:56 AM
Very sad, yes. Some elaboration seems in order.
Re: Mr. Stryker, Do You Really Want Some Kind of War? by cat	3-Aug-04/11:03 AM
An actual observation, no doubt. But it lacks and more than observation, nothing really to provoke thoutht. "there were only two bus. . . "
Re: Wha wha guitar by wnot Dovinaw	3-Aug-04/12:25 PM
The votes and comments here tell us something, don't they?
Re: Marina by INTRANSIT	4-Aug-04/5:25 PM
Sailboat waiting to sail or sailing though foggy. Like it. Try "Peace that Passes Understanding" again and see if my explanation makes sense. I'd like to know. Very little action on Poemranker today. I mean by users who don't call themselves "not Dovina."
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Aug-04/5:28 PM
Kinda sweet really, family, but just enough distant. Like it.
Re: Mike Pike!! by DR Limerick	4-Aug-04/5:30 PM
Now mike is a collossal tripe.
Re: Brats by D. $ Fontera	4-Aug-04/5:34 PM
We're all brats, aren't we?
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Aug-04/11:00 AM
I like the way you've shown the passage of time. First he's 40 and she's 10, then when she's 40, he's 70 and dead. And she's forever 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Aug-04/4:39 PM
The repetition is annoying and adds nothing to the impact. "I don't dream of touching a student" is rather trite. "I stop and I write" doesn't need the second I. Still a fairly good overall thought.