regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-04/2:00 PM
The ending's a sad an pleasant irony. Caps at line starts seem formal for a story poem
Re: A beautiful moment by freelancejoker	10-Aug-04/11:20 AM
Too etherial for me, but some nice lines.
Re: One dot.And the rest is our lives by Prince of Void	10-Aug-04/11:23 AM
Something to ponder for forty days and nights, inspiring.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Aug-04/11:18 AM
This is reelly quite good, but you shouldn't have given yourself a 10, otherwise I might have.
Re: Secret Password by freelancejoker	10-Aug-04/11:22 AM
Sounds Christian, okay if it is. Cryptic, okay too. High on wine, yep, that's me.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Aug-04/3:18 PM
Not bad. Just clean up a few grammar glytches.
Re: I CANNOT FUCKAT2POEMS by daggatolar	10-Aug-04/11:36 AM
You don't need to sing or sign your name at the bottom, dagga, sir. Your dame has sighed or sung it already. Five, really?
Re: A Rally by hobojo	10-Aug-04/11:28 AM
"looked down on his throne" is thrown from the middle ages and a great line. "Surely they're shared" is not, try they've. Overall, an inspiring thought.
Re: Reaction: Photo-Hung Over the Euphrates by eyrbare	9-Aug-04/3:09 PM
The title doesn't exactly invite one to read on, but once through the door, it's not bad going unless you're squeamish.
Re: Torment From The Undead by XxRuby_KillsXx	8-Aug-04/12:38 PM
Oh, you gave yourself a 10 and me a 1. Okay, whatever.
Re: Certain circles by INTRANSIT	7-Aug-04/11:10 AM
A brief epoch and a little didactic. Good "who's" "weathered face"
Re: Sand Palace by Caducus	7-Aug-04/1:05 PM
Why the semicolon standing guard off to the right? The second verse is very nice. It's all good.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Aug-04/12:28 PM
Sounds like a comment on a good poem or a good comment on a medochre poem. Do you mean the scales on a garter snake? I can't imagine "nothing left to say" unless you mean death. The bull goes on forever.
Re: The Glow of the Sun by QuirkyWonder	6-Aug-04/10:55 AM
Ah, to be young again, or old again, still lying on the beach. Not bad.
Re: Punk Rock Christmas by unknown^user	10-Aug-04/8:10 AM
When you say "fucking shoes" it implies some angst with the shod, and "no fucking raver" some reason to rave, but since you show none, the poem would be stronger without these. I can't relate poem to title without stretching my karma.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Aug-04/3:24 PM
A fun and slightly erotic read. A bunch of tricky words, some of them new. I wish the last verse followed the style as well as the others.
Re: OLD AGE BLUES by massangel62	10-Aug-04/8:00 AM
Let's hope there's more to old age than a kindly smile given to friends who's minds are as far gone as yours. Use it or lose it, like having the presence of mind to put your comment to somebody's comment right under their comment. By the way, your poem starts off well enough, I just think the ending could be a lot better.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Aug-04/11:59 AM
Love the last line and the overall spirit of the rest. Give up the cigarettes.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Aug-04/1:12 PM
Brugge , Belgium, I suppose. Thick as a slab of what? The rest brings memories.
Re: A Beautiful Pain by timtonio	5-Aug-04/4:49 PM
A good thought. "a future foretold" tends to spoil the intrigue that's otherwise there.