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A Beautiful Pain (Free verse) by timtonio
My mind left to anarchy. Scratches on the chalkboard, Reminders of a painful past. Your kind bathes in serenity. Dashes on the chalkboard, Indicators of a painless future. We find little commonality. A blank chalkboard, A divided past, a future foretold.
Up the ladder: Depth of Illusion
Down the ladder: Cassius
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.571429
Weighted score: 5.422622
Overall Rank: 3061
Posted: August 5, 2004 4:44 PM PDT; Last modified: August 5, 2004 4:44 PM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 5-Aug-04/4:49 PM | Reply
A good thought. "a future foretold" tends to spoil the intrigue that's otherwise there.
[8] New Life Drug @ 69.106.227.126 | 6-Aug-04/12:11 AM | Reply
agreed
[n/a] timtonio @ 172.162.226.67 | 6-Aug-04/1:11 PM | Reply
yeah it does a bit
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