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nice day (Free verse) by New Life Drug
can you make yourself available to me? can you take a moment to stop and say hello at least I wanna see your eyes up close this time you said you were counting the days well the day has come so why arent you near me? this isn't quite the summer weather I predicted in fact this rain isn't anything we need it only makes the sadness fit the setting but we need a little sun to help us bleed we need more pink and orange than blue I need to finally get to you because this week is ours and its unlike the people that say "I haven't got all day" because we've got it now the animals distract us they can see us walking by they need food and water, but we need love forget them, next Sunday they're going to die Being surrounded now by lights and dust just makes me want to be alone but not with myself, no not with myself I said I didn't want to talk to you but I lied, I'm dying to I'm sorry I go out and hide it makes no sense to either one what happened to our nonstop fun? fuck this

Up the ladder: Once they were gliders.
Down the ladder: where to go

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5398
Posted: August 2, 2004 9:40 PM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2004 9:40 PM PDT
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[7] cat @ 64.164.169.80 | 2-Aug-04/11:07 PM | Reply
i know this sounds dumb, but i like how you said it, i just don't like the subject, i wish there was a subjective vote and an objective vote...
[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 3-Aug-04/10:42 AM | Reply
Quite good, really, except for the last line, which because I'm accused of being a prude, I will say doesn't fit here.
[9] MacFrantic @ 198.81.26.16 | 3-Aug-04/10:45 PM | Reply
I, in turn believe that the last line is fitting and I'd love to have you on my show. *9*
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