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I miss you still (Free verse) by beck2457
I Miss You Still… ...2,122 days 12 hours 58 minutes 183,387,540 heartbeats from the night we parted I miss you still Infinite tears Songs, memories, places Always present Wanting to escape No where to run No where to turn Broken hearted Too scared to fight Too scared to loose I miss you still Years gone by Tears are distant and tears are few I think of you Where are you? How’s your life? Wondering what memories you cherish, Which you have chosen to forget, I too have those, which I choose and choose not to Remember and forget I miss you still Becky Betancourt 5/26/03

Up the ladder: I Am From
Down the ladder: What is the use of the lid?

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10269
Posted: August 2, 2004 12:39 PM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2004 12:39 PM PDT
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[5] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 2-Aug-04/12:46 PM | Reply
I-miss-you poems are very common. They can be good if free from the usual cliches and having something more than the usual that this has.
[n/a] beck2457 @ 65.141.102.12 > Dovina | 2-Aug-04/3:58 PM | Reply
Interesting critique Dovina. I have only written two poems . I wrote this not as a poem persay but to my x obviously.
Thank you for reading it and taking the time to comment.I am a visual artist and welcome critique.
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