I don't know how I missed this one before - it doesn't contain your best lines, but the design is ingenious

I agree, this is pleasingly sardonic.

Again I like this, but I sometimes think that you're too obscure - I don't see what 'he tide of convention' has to do with what's gone before. I think this has a personal meaning for you that doesn't transmit to the reader.

I like the simple symbolism of this, the equilibrium achieved

This is the best thing yet I've read of yours. It's bleeding funny. It's laconic. Lovely.

I don't see why the person who gave this a nought wa a hypocrite, if they really didn't like it. However, I like it, especially the ending when the ambivalence of Christianity becomes clear.

This is very enigmatic but I like the different currents of regret and loss and possibility that pull against each other. The middle stanza of part III is too opaque for me - I think you might need to spell out the 'things too close' a little more.

This is very enigmatic but I like the different currents of regret and loss and possibility that pull against each other. The middle stanza of part III is too opaque for me - I think you might need to spell the 'things too close' a little more.

I think I'll take that as a compliment.

I think they may have held in orbit for a while, but they never collided, no. No wonder he's so sad 'cos i think she was a beauty.

I'd usually agree with you about repeating one word ina line, but on this occasion I thought - 'damn it, the time has come'. I like the rhythm it gives really. Glad you like it Mrs G.

Of what?

Hey nentwined, I know you run this site and all but i just clicked on random five times and evry poem that came up was one of yours! Nevertheless, I like this, even that strange parenthetical section.

These are funny and I like the way you've forced the rhymes to comic effect, but none of these buggers scans properly.

I quite like the idea of this, but your archaic language leads you into trouble. There never has been such a word as 'thoueth' - you want 'thou' here, although 'you' would be even better - and 'please don't leave none stone unturned' is a double negative - either 'don't leave a stone' or 'leave no stone' (certainly not 'none'). But your structure works well as you run through all the possibilities. Just cut out the medieval language, it's not necessary.

This would make a great song - early Dylan kind of thing.

very good. I like the way the alternating long/short lines reflect the breathing and the sensuality of the smoke. Not that i condone such a revolting habit. Just say no, kids.

In what way are you Macbeth? Have you just been off killing kings? Seeing your best friend's ghost? Meeting witches? What?? This infuriates me.

The second two lines redeem the first, which are confused. By the end though, I'm smitten too.

I know the feeling exactly. I wish you'd gone for a more regular rhyme scheme or something to tie it all together, but I get the message loud and clear.