Re: The Writing Life by poetandknowit	10-Sep-02/1:02 AM
Very funny, a real snapshot of life as we all too disturbingly know it
Re: purple by youngweirdo	6-Sep-02/8:01 AM
Belive me I'm not trying to bring the blackness to your life Doylum. But I can't help it if the overarching darkness of life is so bleakly apparent today. Perhaps it is the end.
Re: Forbidden Love by beakism	6-Sep-02/7:59 AM
Normally I quite like bathos but the last line here is just a step too far. But this is pretty darn good
Re: purple by youngweirdo	6-Sep-02/7:48 AM
Turtle. That's the closest I can get. But really, who cares?
Re: School (a sonnet) by Nicholas Jones	6-Sep-02/7:46 AM
I think we'll have to agree to disagree. School isn't perfect, but the alternative is mass illiteracy and the end of civilisation. Or something.
Re: Life's Great Irony by Tascobar	6-Sep-02/7:34 AM
This is quite funny. Yep.
Re: Remembrance by dragonfly	6-Sep-02/3:25 AM
I like the regretful tone of this, but 'Like if it were yesterday' is ungrammatical - 'As if it were yesterday' would be right. 'Handing me' is curious as well - handing you something? Touching you? It's quite a nice phrase.
Re: Evensong by Nicholas Jones	6-Sep-02/3:20 AM
Black black it's all black.
Re: Evensong by Nicholas Jones	6-Sep-02/2:39 AM
I prefer nothingness to belief in a myth. Or rather, I believe in humanity and the universe rather than an external god. But this poem is good because it raises this debate; it is individual and provocative.
Re: i would have you by silvertongueddevil	5-Sep-02/9:50 AM
I like this a lot - very suggestive and poised
Re: Do Swans Get Jealous? (#2) by Christof	4-Sep-02/5:43 AM
In the crowded parks in central London you don't have much choice.....
Re: Walk With Me by Ojiboch	4-Sep-02/4:25 AM
I like this, it has a real freshness
Re: The United Fates Of America by Lenore	4-Sep-02/1:51 AM
It is very interesting, as an Englishman, to read an American view of America. I don't know if a lot of Americans really know how their country is viewed by a large part of the rest of the world, but this poem at least shows real awareness. All great Empires crumble eventually - it happened to Rome, it happened to Britain... The only quibble I have is that I don't think that he with the 'heart of ice', whom I take to be Osama Bin Laden, is either cold-hearted or hungry for power - I think he is extremely hot in his passions and not hungry for power for himself but rather fixated on removing the power of his enemies.
Re: Melancholia by vulcan	4-Sep-02/1:37 AM
I think this goes beyond Melancholia - it is a baldly stated death wish! But the phrasing is strong and , as always, your metre is powerful.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	4-Sep-02/1:04 AM
Good grief. I obviously went home too early yesterday. If I'd hung on a bit I could've joined in with you lot. I was just in the mood too. What a sexed up place this is.
Re: The Hand of God by Christof	3-Sep-02/8:41 AM
It's good to be an island of Englishness, although I think I miss out on a lot of references. It's an education. Glad you liked the poem.
Re: The Stifling Moment by vulcan	3-Sep-02/7:59 AM
And sorry for 'dmamn' - I meant 'damn'. This is great anyway.
Re: The Stifling Moment by vulcan	3-Sep-02/7:53 AM
You yourself have written a mean dmamn pice of poetry here. You can hear that hush.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/7:51 AM
Thanks Vulcan that means a lot. And best wishes to you!
Re: School (a sonnet) by Nicholas Jones	3-Sep-02/7:20 AM
But I take it you learnt sonnet structure at school - so it wasn't all pointless then was it? Again, I can't agree with your conclusion, and I think this is melodramatic at the end and no half as interesting as 'Evensong'.