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Walk With Me (Free verse) by Ojiboch
Look it's the tree! The tree that I told you about Its glamour is what I hoped you'd notice It got me the first time as well Pick a fruit, its OK At first I was also apprehensive Sit in its shade, see like me Lay on the grass, the soft grass that has the privilege to live around the trunk Look up-the tree trunk leads to a thousand leaves dancing in the wind You should be here in the fall, it's the most beautiful sight one can see Wind gives it life; the braches love it-they can play and move in the air Pick up that newly fallen leaf Feel it and close your eyes-it's as soft as your dreams You can dream here under the tree all you wish Keep it a secret, please Isn't it so lovely to see, a welcome from reality You can cry under the tree when you feel a need You can even sleep in its arms as they protect you from the sun and harmful worries No one knows it exists, alone here in the mist of early morning Ssshhh! can you hear the birds sing? They are! Look up to see them share in this wonderful place Now it's my time to go, I've only come here to show Please keep it a secret from the rest, the outside must not touch the harmony here Love it as I have, cherish its beauty like no other Please, please don't say a word about the tree I trust you, it's between you and me

Up the ladder: The river
Down the ladder: Wenches Wail

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Weighted score: 5.0476813
Overall Rank: 6832
Posted: September 4, 2002 3:36 AM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2002 3:36 AM PDT
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Comments:
[7] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 4-Sep-02/4:25 AM | Reply
I like this, it has a real freshness
[8] morffrom @ 213.122.63.16 | 4-Sep-02/5:51 AM | Reply
I agree its serene -8/10
[n/a] vulcan @ 80.242.3.174 | 4-Sep-02/7:00 AM | Reply
"the spontanous overflow of powerful feelings!".I liked it esp "a welcome from reality".In general highly original.
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