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Remembrance (Free verse) by dragonfly I hear your voice
Singing inside
Humming inside
Echoing through me like a recurring dream
I feel you near
Softly beside me
Handing me
Reaching out for me like a child in need
I see it all so clearly
Like if it were yesterday
You and I laughing
I miss those days...
I miss you.
Up the ladder:
Through DUSK till DAWN
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Household Sex Agents (tooles)
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Posted: September 5, 2002 2:35 PM PDT; Last modified: September 5, 2002 2:35 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.921164 Overall Rank: 199 Comments:
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
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6-Sep-02/3:25 AM
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I like the regretful tone of this, but 'Like if it were yesterday' is ungrammatical - 'As if it were yesterday' would be right. 'Handing me' is curious as well - handing you something? Touching you? It's quite a nice phrase.
very nice, a loved one never really leaves us for they remain close to our hearts and memories....Bob:)
Like it was yesterday.
I feel nostalgic too in a queer way!!! Nice work
sad but bad
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