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Remembrance (Free verse) by dragonfly

I hear your voice Singing inside Humming inside Echoing through me like a recurring dream I feel you near Softly beside me Handing me Reaching out for me like a child in need I see it all so clearly Like if it were yesterday You and I laughing I miss those days... I miss you.

Christof 6-Sep-02/3:25 AM
I like the regretful tone of this, but 'Like if it were yesterday' is ungrammatical - 'As if it were yesterday' would be right. 'Handing me' is curious as well - handing you something? Touching you? It's quite a nice phrase.

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