Re: a comment on Circle by Christof	19-Sep-02/8:21 AM
I think I'm more the one woman, unsympathetic family man type. It's the family bit that doesn't sit so well with me...
Re: a comment on Circle by Christof	19-Sep-02/8:17 AM
Hey i don't poopoo the amrital state, it amkes people very happy. It also makes some people very unhappy. I'm pretty down with it though. Would you re-vote on 'Gone Away'? 'Cos it's finally finished.
Re: a comment on "REAL" People by Scouser	19-Sep-02/7:46 AM
Fair enough. I'd be voting against, but I agree that we should have the choice and not just do whatever Bush wants us to.
Re: Little lady by dolores	19-Sep-02/7:44 AM
I like this - there's a big implied story behind the poem. The simplicity of what the girl 'says' is very childlike.
Re: "REAL" People by Scouser	19-Sep-02/7:39 AM
These a very valid points, given that we're on the brink of a war that no one wants... (in UK anyway)
Re: a comment on Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman	19-Sep-02/7:32 AM
Oh ha ha!
Re: a comment on Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman	19-Sep-02/7:31 AM
He's a very naughty boy... What do you think he's tugging?
Re: Baked Peach Cobbler Windowed by horus8	19-Sep-02/3:01 AM
Uncles are rarely trustworthy. Keep your distance.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	19-Sep-02/2:34 AM
I think you just need some friends....
Re: Virus by bluwiz	18-Sep-02/8:38 AM
Ther's a lot of truth to this, and to your Infection poem as well - you handle metaphor very well.
Re: dps 2 - new ver. by decadentlaurel	18-Sep-02/8:05 AM
Version 1 is much better than this - simpler, more honest, less 'poetic'.
Re: Freeform (No votes yet) 0 comments by abecedarian	18-Sep-02/7:53 AM
It is the same for us all. By the way, if you are an abecedarian don't you believe that it's wrong to learn to read? What are you doing on a poetry site?
Re: 1 of 2,543 things she does that starts fires in your grassland heart. by mogwai	18-Sep-02/7:36 AM
It is a great suggestive title and maybe it would be nice to see it taken up in the poem itself, but I still like the scene that's presented here.
Re: cars by mogwai	18-Sep-02/7:33 AM
This is sweet.
Re: Stifled by wordsphincter	18-Sep-02/7:32 AM
What are stolen lips? Give them back. The last line makes no sense - your eyes may never grasp courts? the nocturnal companion courts something that the eys will enver grasp? I've never seen eyes grasping anything anyway - yeuurch.
Re: Walls by razorgrin	18-Sep-02/7:27 AM
I wonder if the room with walls the colour of heartblood is actually a metaphor for your heart? The alliteration of 'w' is good, creating the effect of the woind. And don't get rid of the definite articles because they give this poem a knotty, medieval rhythm that sits well with the wolves.
Re: a comment on A Passing Love by razorgrin	18-Sep-02/7:19 AM
I'll let you off. My Canadian sucks so I can't really complain. Enjoy studying rituals. This is mine: wake up, rue the fact that I just woke up, haul my carcass into work, assiduously hide paper in my litter bin, stretch out lunch to an hour and a half, go home, poke my eyes out with sticks, sleep. Repeat.
Re: A Passing Love by razorgrin	18-Sep-02/7:02 AM
The comments on this poem have become seriously deranged.... I just like the story of your poem. Drugging your lovers is the best way of maintaining a relationship. But the first stanza doesn't rhyme in my accent - we say 'sconn' not 'scown'. Please be more considerate of your southern English readers.
Re: a comment on Our New Tongue by Christof	18-Sep-02/6:21 AM
No she's not... do you think that because of the oaths? because they were strictly non-legal personal oaths. Always be wary of getting the local Registrar involved, that's what I say.
Re: A black sanded tropical vision by horus8	18-Sep-02/2:48 AM
This is my favourite of yours becuase that lost innocnence and the fracturing of the self that goes with it comes out so loud and clear. Your focus is much tighter than usual and the poem really benefits from it. This is great.