replying on Circle by Christof
19 Sep 2002, 8:17 AM
Hey i don't poopoo the amrital state, it amkes people very happy. It also makes some people very unhappy. I'm pretty down with it though. Would you re-vote on 'Gone Away'? 'Cos it's finally finished.
replying on "REAL" People by Scouser
19 Sep 2002, 7:46 AM
Fair enough. I'd be voting against, but I agree that we should have the choice and not just do whatever Bush wants us to.
on Little lady by dolores
19 Sep 2002, 7:44 AM
I like this - there's a big implied story behind the poem. The simplicity of what the girl 'says' is very childlike.
on "REAL" People by Scouser
19 Sep 2002, 7:39 AM
These a very valid points, given that we're on the brink of a war that no one wants... (in UK anyway)
replying on Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman
19 Sep 2002, 7:32 AM
Oh ha ha!
replying on Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman
19 Sep 2002, 7:31 AM
He's a very naughty boy... What do you think he's tugging?
on Baked Peach Cobbler Windowed by horus8
19 Sep 2002, 3:01 AM
Uncles are rarely trustworthy. Keep your distance.
on I hate people by Bazilla
19 Sep 2002, 2:34 AM
I think you just need some friends....
on dps 2 - new ver. by decadentlaurel
18 Sep 2002, 8:05 AM
Version 1 is much better than this - simpler, more honest, less 'poetic'.
on Freeform (No votes yet) 0 comments by abecedarian
18 Sep 2002, 7:53 AM
It is the same for us all. By the way, if you are an abecedarian don't you believe that it's wrong to learn to read? What are you doing on a poetry site?
on 1 of 2,543 things she does that starts fires in your grassland heart. by mogwai
18 Sep 2002, 7:36 AM
It is a great suggestive title and maybe it would be nice to see it taken up in the poem itself, but I still like the scene that's presented here.
on Stifled by wordsphincter
18 Sep 2002, 7:32 AM
What are stolen lips? Give them back. The last line makes no sense - your eyes may never grasp courts? the nocturnal companion courts something that the eys will enver grasp? I've never seen eyes grasping anything anyway - yeuurch.
I wonder if the room with walls the colour of heartblood is actually a metaphor for your heart? The alliteration of 'w' is good, creating the effect of the woind. And don't get rid of the definite articles because they give this poem a knotty, medieval rhythm that sits well with the wolves.
replying on A Passing Love by razorgrin
18 Sep 2002, 7:19 AM
I'll let you off. My Canadian sucks so I can't really complain. Enjoy studying rituals. This is mine: wake up, rue the fact that I just woke up, haul my carcass into work, assiduously hide paper in my litter bin, stretch out lunch to an hour and a half, go home, poke my eyes out with sticks, sleep. Repeat.
on A Passing Love by razorgrin
18 Sep 2002, 7:02 AM
The comments on this poem have become seriously deranged.... I just like the story of your poem. Drugging your lovers is the best way of maintaining a relationship. But the first stanza doesn't rhyme in my accent - we say 'sconn' not 'scown'. Please be more considerate of your southern English readers.
replying on Our New Tongue by Christof
18 Sep 2002, 6:21 AM
No she's not... do you think that because of the oaths? because they were strictly non-legal personal oaths. Always be wary of getting the local Registrar involved, that's what I say.
on A black sanded tropical vision by horus8
18 Sep 2002, 2:48 AM
This is my favourite of yours becuase that lost innocnence and the fracturing of the self that goes with it comes out so loud and clear. Your focus is much tighter than usual and the poem really benefits from it. This is great.
on The Politics of Fashion by bondjedi
18 Sep 2002, 2:43 AM
Witty - 'Dawson's Creek' should always be flipped from.