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Circle

by Christof

Member since 2002 · Posted 19 Sep 2002 · 18 comments

The finger upon the piano key Topples a note like a domino Into eternity Beyond the limits of the sensory Ringing through the ear's soft-yielding bowl Into memory So let the rings upon our fingers be The first notes of our eternal vow That's the key

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18 comments

[6] god'swife 19-Sep-02/8:04 AM Reply
You know for someone who poopoos the marital state, you sure write about it a lot.
[n/a] Christof › god'swife 19-Sep-02/8:17 AM Reply
Hey i don't poopoo the amrital state, it amkes people very happy. It also makes some people very unhappy. I'm pretty down with it though. Would you re-vote on 'Gone Away'? 'Cos it's finally finished.
[6] god'swife 19-Sep-02/8:20 AM Reply
Are you the one woman, sympathetic family man type?
[n/a] Christof › god'swife 19-Sep-02/8:21 AM Reply
I think I'm more the one woman, unsympathetic family man type. It's the family bit that doesn't sit so well with me...
[6] god'swife › Christof 19-Sep-02/8:30 AM Reply
Wow, I literally pictured you with a curly-top toddler on your lap and the not so much older children sitting on the floor around you laughing at your stories. The beautiful wifey admiring the scene from the kitchen door(mixing spoon in hand) Go figure.
[n/a] Christof › god'swife 19-Sep-02/8:32 AM Reply
That's so far from the truth! Though there is a beautiful wifey, I'm pretty terrible with kids. I'm always afraid I'm going to break them in some way, as I'm pretty clumsy and inept. I have a fear of dropping children on their heads.
[6] poetandknowit 19-Sep-02/8:41 AM Reply
Ah yes, the Times, coffee, a tug and poo and a poem from Chistof to start my day. The circle motif is a bit overused, but always sweet when chaps don't throw the cynicism behind it. I would do that, but you my friend, are to damn sweet.
[6] god'swife › poetandknowit 19-Sep-02/8:44 AM Reply
What's with all the tugging?
[n/a] <~> › god'swife 19-Sep-02/8:46 AM Reply
they're not getting any, maybe...
[6] god'swife › <~> 19-Sep-02/8:50 AM Reply
Oh.
[n/a] Christof › poetandknowit 19-Sep-02/8:44 AM Reply
Well that's nice. Glad to see that I take the same priority in your day as a good crap!
[6] poetandknowit › Christof 19-Sep-02/8:50 AM Reply
Yes, and all like clockwork. I was lost over the weekend when you did not post anything. Nentwhistle should make an exception for you and let you post as much as you want. Just so you know, in my new poem I was so inspired by your work that I too used birdies.
[n/a] Christof › poetandknowit 19-Sep-02/8:53 AM Reply
I am so pleased that birdies have finally infiltrated from my work to yours-this must be your new poem about your father and the sea. I'll take a look... And i do like to post as oftten as poss, just to keep you satisfied.
[8] Frass 19-Sep-02/9:59 AM Reply
Strong material, Chrstf. I like 'beond the limits of the sensory.' Jolly good.
[7] kawakurdi 19-Sep-02/11:16 AM Reply
I like the parallel of logic and sensuality in this poem: careful description of sensual material thing and then giving it a mental sublimation. As the piece is a logical-knit, I think "Into eternity! line 3, comes too quick and the subsequent explanation ending with line 6 "Into memory" weakens the sense of eternity not strengthens it: as eternity is obviously more eternal
than memory. Otherwise, a perfect
poetic incarnation.
[8] searching 25-Sep-02/5:13 AM Reply
I love the illusion this portrays or should I say "reality"? Such is the life of the tragic romantic.
[8] daniella 19-Oct-02/10:25 PM Reply
i did turn it once. but got locked out.
[8] -=SeTTle=- 4-Jan-03/10:32 PM Reply
A little jokey at the end don't you think? Otherwise quite good. There's a lot you can do with pianos.