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Circle
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Free verse
) by
Christof
The finger upon the piano key Topples a note like a domino Into eternity Beyond the limits of the sensory Ringing through the ear's soft-yielding bowl Into memory So let the rings upon our fingers be The first notes of our eternal vow That's the key
kawakurdi
19-Sep-02/11:16 AM
I like the parallel of logic and sensuality in this poem: careful description of sensual material thing and then giving it a mental sublimation. As the piece is a logical-knit, I think "Into eternity! line 3, comes too quick and the subsequent explanation ending with line 6 "Into memory" weakens the sense of eternity not strengthens it: as eternity is obviously more eternal
than memory. Otherwise, a perfect
poetic incarnation.
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