Comments byChristof, 601–620 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Hamptons by bondjedi 18 Sep 2002, 2:41 AM
But there's only 5 in the last line?
on Hamptons by bondjedi 18 Sep 2002, 2:40 AM
Sounds like my kind of girl
replying on Gone Away by Christof 18 Sep 2002, 1:25 AM
You and Brazen have convinced me - please vote again chaps!
replying on Like and Unlike by Christof 13 Sep 2002, 3:35 AM
Confusion in this case is good! I decided to subvert myself a bit. And 'tone' - I need a rhyme for 'xylophone' and it makes me think of a clinical description, which I like for this poem. I read thos one myself and thought 'this is a bit odd'.
replying on Like and Unlike by Christof 13 Sep 2002, 3:31 AM
'Dully' is an adverb - the unknown meets the unknown in a dully way. It's a good word aurally, but I admit it looks a bit peculiar on paper.(or screen). Also I know what you mean about moths, but I liked the implied fragility of the butterfly wing that for me the moth doesn't have. What an abstruse distinction to have to make. And we have some very mottled and drab butterflies in England.
on Full Fathom Five by vulcan 13 Sep 2002, 3:21 AM
I like your turning to literature for comfort and finding some salvation there. 'gray Elegy' also brings to mind Thomas Gray's 'Elegy in a Country Churchyard' - is this deliberate?
on We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass 13 Sep 2002, 1:16 AM
This is funny - I especially like your last couple of lines.
replying on Gone Away by Christof 13 Sep 2002, 1:13 AM
If only!
replying on Gone Away by Christof 12 Sep 2002, 9:02 AM
Maybe we have a misunderstanding - someone else used the word portentous and I in my paranoia ran away with it and thought you were accusing me of all sorts. Many apologies.
replying on Like and Unlike by Christof 12 Sep 2002, 8:59 AM
I'm glad you liked it, but I think I realised it needed a bit more work. Soemthing wasn't quite working for me. I might put it up again next week - I'm glad you really liked it.
replying on Gone Away by Christof 12 Sep 2002, 8:57 AM
I'm sure I can work some in somewhere. Maybe a cuckoo clock?
replying on Gone Away by Christof 12 Sep 2002, 8:52 AM
Ta very much. I think 'calculation' sounds better in a stand-alone line. Don't know why, just the rhythm in my ears really. But I'm happy with this poem now, after much fiddling around. Thanks for your help with it.
replying on father Worked Nights by poetandknowit 12 Sep 2002, 8:31 AM
Well that's alright then. We part on civil terms, secure in the knowledge that birds and urbs will be duly notified and logged. Go well my friend.
replying on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus 12 Sep 2002, 8:28 AM
Why these beautiful compliments and eulogies, whatever have I done to deserve it? But what does Bachus have against the left-handed poem. All of mine are left-handed...maybe I've answered my own question
replying on lost by Katie 12 Sep 2002, 8:23 AM
Very wise advice Limness. Katie has years and years to get shackled to somebody - enjoy yourself while you can!
replying on Gone Away by Christof 12 Sep 2002, 8:10 AM
I hadn't thought of the fact that women usually outlive men. Hmm, I am suddenly cheered!
replying on father Worked Nights by poetandknowit 12 Sep 2002, 7:07 AM
Gee whiz you really know how to treat a guy
replying on father Worked Nights by poetandknowit 12 Sep 2002, 6:43 AM
Um, what happens if I refuse?
on Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism 12 Sep 2002, 6:37 AM
I like poems that namecheck 'Blankety Blank'.
replying on Gone Away by Christof 12 Sep 2002, 6:19 AM
Well I suppose the dead are leaden. Thanks for all your help, I feel like I've made a minor breakthrough today. This is what poemranker should be about. I am greatly heartened.