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lost (Free verse) by Katie Fights and arguments,
Yelling, and cussing,
Confusion, and sadness,
Love and happiness.
Through all the pain and suffering,
Through all the good times,
Through our laughter,
Through are pain.
Were not the same,
We've changed.
From better to worse,
To a loss of words.
I'm not sure what to say around you,
Not sure how to act around you.
Should I walk by and scream hi,
Or should I just ignore the fact that your alive?
My other half I feel is gone,
I feel so lost, and all alone,
Without you by my side,
I just want to run away and cry,
where no one can hear me,
or see me,
alone and oh so weak.
Up the ladder:
wandering, north
Down the ladder:
She Seeks To Know Me
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5833335
Posted: September 12, 2002 5:53 AM PDT; Last modified: December 20, 2002 7:09 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.1575093 Overall Rank: 1048 Comments:
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Limness @ 24.44.185.41
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12-Sep-02/8:18 AM
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Why would someone your age let another be your everything? Look in the mirror, and smile. Put it out there; There'll be lots more takers baby.
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
> Limness
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12-Sep-02/8:23 AM
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Very wise advice Limness. Katie has years and years to get shackled to somebody - enjoy yourself while you can!
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god'swife @ 209.179.213.91
> Christof
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12-Sep-02/9:41 AM
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Enjoy yourself while you can?!?! Jesus christ Christof! I picture you falling into the abyss as you wail out your last word of advice. The poem is self-indulgent. Katie, are you taking creative writing?
The begining sounds like a list but I like that there is emotion in it. I give it a 5.
I understand the pain you have gone through in this poem hon... but rest assured, the one whom you seek, you shall find and happiness eternal, you shall roam free :o) Great Poem!!
er yeah but you just made that up just now, didn't you? The fact that someone could read your comment and then somehow feel comforted by it is totally amazing. But then again, we are talking about Katie here...
"Through are pain"...change that. For your age it's not bad, but try to experiment with different subject matters. There's more to life than guys....like smurfs.
innocent, sweet, you are obviously a seed of a writer but its quite refreshing to see work from the heart warts and all
'work from the heart' is the least 'refreshing' kind work you could ever find. It is, in fact, the most generic kind of work you could ever find. You, Sir, are a Cadlington of the First Class.
change the last word to 'beak'
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