on Brackish by <~>
30 Dec 2002, 3:46 AM
This is expansive and wonderful - 'frugal wisdom' I like a lot and the general sensual realism of it. Top stuff.
on some deleted poem
1 Apr 2003, 7:11 AM
Well done, Mr Prettycock, you obviously know how to keep a lady happy. I can't wait until I'm 40+ and have a webcam.
on The yellow rose of California by INTRANSIT
2 Jan 2003, 3:55 AM
Hey Intransit, how's it going? I
ve been out of circulation for a while due to losing my job etc etc and having no computer - I'm reduced to using an Internet cafe. But glad to see you're continuing your quest for truth'n'beauty and all that. Keep it coming.
ve been out of circulation for a while due to losing my job etc etc and having no computer - I'm reduced to using an Internet cafe. But glad to see you're continuing your quest for truth'n'beauty and all that. Keep it coming.
on some deleted poem
2 Jan 2003, 3:59 AM
I'm surprised to see you've taken down some of your Greatest Hits - why o why? This keeps the good work going though. I can't agree with p&k on this because I like the mythical archetype used here (though the couplet about Lady/Knight I can't quite swallow).
on The Day the Winter Muse Fighters of the World Came By by <~>
30 Dec 2002, 3:47 AM
This is crazed and funny. I don't know what a Winter Muse Fighter might look like, but they sound sneaky and unreliable.
on missing you by Goose
19 Nov 2002, 8:03 AM
The bit about the dirty joke is good, but I don't think you need the last two lines. It would be better left to just tail off, like your relationship.
on Litany of the Mullet by Shin-Bojangles
19 Nov 2002, 8:06 AM
I don't know if it's really lives up to the sacred heights of the haiku, but it is an insight into the mullet-wearer's psyche and invaluable for that reason.
on some deleted poem
19 Nov 2002, 8:23 AM
Does it all have to be in capitals? I feel like I'm being shouted at. Quite like the poem though.
on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus
19 Nov 2002, 8:29 AM
The last three lines carry a great burden very gracefully. I wonder a bit at the variation in rhyme scheme between end end of s 1 and the of s2, but that's just the pernickety formalist in me trying to get out. The main thing is you got a sensitive comment from Bachus - that is all the praise you will ever need. Well done.
on Reasons by little_angel_maria
19 Nov 2002, 8:47 AM
Yes, 'cancel time' is very good - I quite like the 'art you make in bed' too.
on some deleted poem
19 Nov 2002, 8:53 AM
This is smashing, first five lines especially - 'involute dust', excellent.
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 1:13 AM
I like the metaphor of man for wall, taking him apart to recreate him - the rebirth imagery is very strong. My only query is about the animals 'on legs in multiples of four' - seems a bit periphrastic. Other than that, this is absolutely spot on.
on some deleted poem
12 Nov 2002, 7:48 AM
This is catchy, like a pop song. I'm making up a tune as I go along. Nice.
on Picnic Of Love by -=SeTTle=-
12 Nov 2002, 7:52 AM
What the hell is going on? This is not what one expects of you. Irony or no, this is too Disney for anyone's sanity.
on My Woman, My Lover, My Friend by -=SeTTle=-
12 Nov 2002, 7:54 AM
This just has to be a joke. Please please please let it be a joke
on Weekend at the Taj by <~>
19 Feb 2003, 9:58 AM
The villanelle, what a lovely form, and so wittily used. Is Atlantic city a good place to end up ensnowed? I have no idea.
on Charles and Eddie by Nicholas Jones
21 Feb 2003, 5:16 AM
So this isn't a biogrpahy of the famous one-hit-wonder singing duo (as you omit the sad demise of c or E - can't remember which, I reckon it isn't). I like the different voices of the two the same situations seen from different points of view.
on The last day of an old year by poetandknowit
21 Feb 2003, 5:12 AM
I like the gentle humour of this, the contrast of poet and girls, the reforming drinker and the innocent daughters of the church. This one's rhythms sneak into you subtly without even trying. Top stuff.
on Offence by Stephen Robins
1 Apr 2003, 7:07 AM
I wept.