Re: THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand	1-Apr-03/7:15 AM
I am disappointed that I don't appear. This can't be right.
Re: On coming across a field of deer one afternoon (2) by <~>	1-Apr-03/7:17 AM
Great rhythm in the last two lines, and assonance to back it up. And the ten tails are perkily descriptive. Wowzers.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Apr-03/7:23 AM
So I wonder who is this about?? I think the thesaurus simile is spot on, the idea of possibilities and interpretations and it all being in the mind (the mind being a very physical thing). really good
Re: ForMyFriend, Joneel by Luv2write	1-Apr-03/7:27 AM
I think this might be better off just being sent to Joneel
Re: A comment for Me (Aj) from a hottie by ChunkyHunkyMonkey	1-Apr-03/7:30 AM
You should write for Dawson's Creek
Re: Worst Haiku Ever by maffy	1-Apr-03/7:32 AM
No, this is the worst haiku ever: Hunky chunky monk Meets tiny spiny pony Spunky chinese punk.
Re: The Adulterous by Caducus	1-Apr-03/7:35 AM
Does that mean I'm free to covet my neighbour's ass? Even though it looks terrible in those polyester slacks?
Re: Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig	13-May-03/4:01 AM
I think i agree with poet andknowit, there's soemthing too highly-wrought about this. i think if it relaxed more there would be more tnederness to it; as it is, it plays like a very artificial masquerade of love's conventions. Individual lines I like very much ('Alive in something sacred' is great) but altogether I feel it's too forced and sometimes melodramatic (our names carved in a diseased sycamore/ Memories never felt this cruel before' - further weakened by the facile rhyme). But there is something real here which I think you uncover elsewhere ('The Blooding').
Re: Family Portrait by Mr Pig	13-May-03/4:06 AM
This would be great as prose, as it is the rhymes just make it all seem bathetic (the best lines are those where the boy reads Hemingway and the mother holds him close - non-rhyming and rhythmically perfect). The chess image is an interesting one which supports the theme of power.
Re: The Blooding by Mr Pig	13-May-03/4:12 AM
This is more like it - a really singular poem, full of arresting images and visceral description. Your feelings of disgust and betrayal are palpable. Love the 'palsied old man'. Brilliant stuff
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-03/4:16 AM
'A profanity of limb and curve' - wow. Sensuality and fathers in the same poem - here's a fine line!
Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT	13-May-03/4:21 AM
Good to see you at number 12, couldn't happen to a nicer guy. And in this poem you've really let yourself go ans surpassed yourself. The sounds are brilliant, the mystery deep and the feeling of the earth is strong and elemental. Really, this is great.
Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT	13-May-03/4:21 AM
Good to see you at number 1, couldn't happen to a nicer guy. And in this poem you've really let yourself go ans surpassed yourself. The sounds are brilliant, the mystery deep and the feeling of the earth is strong and elemental. Really, this is great.
Re: fuck that bitch by Lucifer	13-May-03/9:14 AM
Er, quite. Become a rap star maybe? Then you can spout this out and get to wear cool jewellery and stuff. Eek.
Re: Homecomings by Nicholas Jones	13-May-03/9:18 AM
The last 4 lines are really good, I agree, the rest just a little bald and declamatory.
Re: Cussedness by Nicholas Jones	13-May-03/9:22 AM
You have to admire Hobsbawm for that And I like this haiku, it made me chuckle. Chuckling is good and a very neglected art these days.
Re: CHAMELEON by Jeremi B. Handrinos	13-May-03/9:28 AM
This is surely the work of our old friend Horus8? Hope you get your will back
regarding some deleted poem...	27-May-03/5:57 AM
How very self-referential and ultimately tedious.
Re: Tomorrow by Katie	27-May-03/9:07 AM
The best thing here is the line 'I have no time to lend or borrow' - reminds me of a folk song or something - but the idea of time as a commodity is surprisingly deep here.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-May-03/9:10 AM
Quit this Tony Blair thing, it only works once.