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Weekend at the Taj (Villanelle) by <~> Off my meds in Atlantic City
Snow-bound roads all now are closed--
But the blizzard makes it pretty.
My cash and me, we part quite quickly.
(Seems to this I'm predisposed)
So off my meds in Atlantic City.
Cabin fever has no pity
The Boardwalk offers no repose
Though the blizzard makes it pretty
The second day, I'm feeling gritty.
I just want a change of clothes!
I'm off my meds in Atlantic City.
Host comps a room; he hears my plea.
Sleep, then shower. Still it snows,
But, gee, the blizzard makes it pretty.
A quick day trip turned most lengthy,
On which this poem was composed--
Off my meds in Atlantic City,
And the blizzard made it pretty.
Up the ladder:
Crampa
Down the ladder:
Bad habits & tramps
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Posted: February 18, 2003 9:40 PM PST; Last modified: February 19, 2003 12:31 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.5541997 Overall Rank: 643 Comments:
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scitz @ 62.105.88.10
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19-Feb-03/3:54 AM
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travel the world with me Z, with a stopover in the elvis drive through Vegas, I'll pay for the Howard Johnson's and motel6 and you pay for the fuel, I know how to treat rock chix, this is ice ..8
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<~> @ 167.206.181.179
> scitz
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19-Feb-03/12:32 PM
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will you ride the drop with me atop the stratoshere?
The villanelle, what a lovely form, and so wittily used. Is Atlantic city a good place to end up ensnowed? I have no idea.
it's the seedy las vegas of the east, located in south jersey. nope, not a good place to get stuck.
The great one... When did you get back, online? i thought you were counting sheep in a shack in tasmania?
It's missing your boss and a pawn shop.
ooh. i missed a stanza anyway.
That's what i said;) <{.-:-.}> here's the ufo i promised you. xo h.
meds fucking kill
Fantastic. just fantastic.
Lord Ganus just made profiteroles. Nice use of language.
Enjoyable, to say the least. Does a villanelle have any particular syllable structure or rhythm or anything?
I like it, Zzin. I was stuck at Timberline, WV, ski resort with 10 housemates; officially: 46 inches of snow in 3 1/2 days. I concur, cabin fever has no pity.
i like the contrast of light verse and dark content
This is really good. I've done a lot of mission work in Atlantic City and it's very true to the stories of the people I've met there. Doesn't it look nice with snow on the beach? The water's actually not that bad in the middle of January.
get back on the meds, dude.
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