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Villanelle № 40808

Weekend at the Taj

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Feb 2003 · Edited 19 Feb 2003 · 16 comments

Off my meds in Atlantic City Snow-bound roads all now are closed-- But the blizzard makes it pretty. My cash and me, we part quite quickly. (Seems to this I'm predisposed) So off my meds in Atlantic City. Cabin fever has no pity The Boardwalk offers no repose Though the blizzard makes it pretty The second day, I'm feeling gritty. I just want a change of clothes! I'm off my meds in Atlantic City. Host comps a room; he hears my plea. Sleep, then shower. Still it snows, But, gee, the blizzard makes it pretty. A quick day trip turned most lengthy, On which this poem was composed-- Off my meds in Atlantic City, And the blizzard made it pretty.

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[8] scitz 19-Feb-03/3:54 AM Reply
travel the world with me Z, with a stopover in the elvis drive through Vegas, I'll pay for the Howard Johnson's and motel6 and you pay for the fuel, I know how to treat rock chix, this is ice ..8
[n/a] <~> › scitz 19-Feb-03/12:32 PM Reply
will you ride the drop with me atop the stratoshere?
[9] Christof 19-Feb-03/9:58 AM Reply
The villanelle, what a lovely form, and so wittily used. Is Atlantic city a good place to end up ensnowed? I have no idea.
[n/a] <~> › Christof 19-Feb-03/10:39 AM Reply
it's the seedy las vegas of the east, located in south jersey. nope, not a good place to get stuck.
[7] horus8 › Christof 19-Feb-03/12:17 PM Reply
The great one... When did you get back, online? i thought you were counting sheep in a shack in tasmania?
[7] horus8 19-Feb-03/11:34 AM Reply
It's missing your boss and a pawn shop.
[n/a] <~> › horus8 19-Feb-03/11:52 AM Reply
ooh. i missed a stanza anyway.
[7] horus8 › <~> 19-Feb-03/12:15 PM Reply
That's what i said;) <{.-:-.}> here's the ufo i promised you. xo h.
[n/a] Crakyamuni 19-Feb-03/12:08 PM Reply
meds fucking kill
[10] razorgrin 19-Feb-03/1:27 PM Reply
Fantastic. just fantastic.
[8] -=SeTTle=- 19-Feb-03/5:46 PM Reply
Lord Ganus just made profiteroles. Nice use of language.
[8] Ranger 20-Feb-03/12:02 PM Reply
Enjoyable, to say the least. Does a villanelle have any particular syllable structure or rhythm or anything?
[7] Frass 20-Feb-03/1:26 PM Reply
I like it, Zzin. I was stuck at Timberline, WV, ski resort with 10 housemates; officially: 46 inches of snow in 3 1/2 days. I concur, cabin fever has no pity.
[9] thomb tum 12-Mar-03/12:31 PM Reply
i like the contrast of light verse and dark content
[8] Luv2write 17-Mar-03/4:37 PM Reply
This is really good. I've done a lot of mission work in Atlantic City and it's very true to the stories of the people I've met there. Doesn't it look nice with snow on the beach? The water's actually not that bad in the middle of January.
[4] suckmychucks 10-Apr-03/11:54 AM Reply
get back on the meds, dude.