| Re: Another Tragic Love Poem by greym0on |
30-Oct-02/7:41 AM |
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My first thought was, this is too long. By the end, I was right with you. This is devastatingly sad.
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| Re: I Didn't Know by Bonehiss |
30-Oct-02/7:43 AM |
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Good non-cheesy rhymes, crisp rhythms, a snappy ending - good.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
30-Oct-02/7:53 AM |
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'I wasn't thinking of the fame', I think it should be. Is this to do with Jackie Kennedy?
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| Re: Slept by Nicholas Jones |
1-Nov-02/2:34 AM |
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This happens to me all the time. Guitly conscience or something. Anyway, I recognise a fellow sufferer.
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| Re: St. Andrews University Marxist Society by Nicholas Jones |
1-Nov-02/2:36 AM |
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Well, if you are going to hang out at St Andrews what do you expect? Oxford was much the same. This is very wry.
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| Re: the ultimate battle by teacup |
1-Nov-02/2:42 AM |
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Yes this is pretty funny. Pizza always provokes turf wars
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| Re: Avetis by KilIluminati |
1-Nov-02/2:47 AM |
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Is this translated from another language?
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| Re: SAMUEL by kliq |
1-Nov-02/7:15 AM |
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| Re: Never Alone at Night by Limness |
1-Nov-02/8:05 AM |
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This really is a poem of the night, all the dark longings and questionings that we don't want to face in the daylight. The last stanza and the final line are very moving indeed. I love this.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7-Nov-02/5:53 AM |
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They say that you get the heroes you deserve.How sad for Britain that we apparently deserve a air-headed, emotionally incontinent clothes-horse. I would have voted for Shakespeare if I thought the exercise had any meaning. Which I don't.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7-Nov-02/5:57 AM |
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You do love the word 'cup' don't you? Good luck in your search. I've given up mine for now, but I can see how you're drawn back.
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| Re: Returning by INTRANSIT |
7-Nov-02/6:02 AM |
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I can see the Odysseus thing - allt he sailing and beacon images. I think i would finish after 'again, safe', although 'throwing my ribs/ at her feet' is good'. Perhaps hold that over for a separate poem entirely? It find this last stanza difficult because i appreciate why you want those emotions there, and it does complicate your homecoming in an interesting way, but I think your expression is just too fevered.
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8-Nov-02/1:15 AM |
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And all this before coffee? I am envious. I like the 'rake', very physical.
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| Re: Perversions by razorgrin |
8-Nov-02/1:16 AM |
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The last one is the best - to combine fisting with petty theft is truly a gift.
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| Re: Necromantic Boo-boo by razorgrin |
8-Nov-02/1:18 AM |
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You goddam voodoo types and your lack of foresight. Always check with your local augury reader first.
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8-Nov-02/7:47 AM |
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This is really very good. I've just read your personal profile and you write poetry as you speak, but the sound of it. So you're a natural. And only 17! At this age I had only just got beyond rhyming 'cat' and 'mat'.
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| Re: Tide by <~> |
8-Nov-02/8:09 AM |
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Good grief, I can't believ I've never seen this one before. My radar must have been switched on. This is a killer, anyway - 'Furious with my own leaking' is such a strong phrase.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-Nov-02/8:12 AM |
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I bet you're disappointed that since your dual identity became known Babbitt's poems have fallen out of favour. The public is a fickle creature. This is still tops, though. It is good to come back tothe old ones sometimes.
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| Re: Hehehe by The Eskimo King |
11-Nov-02/1:54 AM |
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Well Mr Eskimo King, thanks for your highly constructive comment on my poem. It would be nice to have some reason for your hefty disapproval. Especially when your own offering is a Purple Ronnie rip off. So come on Shakespeare, what was so bad about mine?
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| Re: arise by daniella |
11-Nov-02/2:22 AM |
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Something very mystic about this - a religious impulse I don't share, but which is impressive.
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