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the ultimate battle (Free verse) by teacup
fighting struggling gasping I am being smothered. I can't fight back I'm going to be crushed When finally I'm set free I am sorry I angered him so by taking the last piece of pizza.

Up the ladder: Hunter's Moon
Down the ladder: "so called" reality

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2222223
Weighted score: 5.611111
Overall Rank: 2260
Posted: October 31, 2002 11:41 PM PST; Last modified: October 31, 2002 11:41 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 | 1-Nov-02/1:32 AM | Reply
I like the fact that the first four lines could be some horrible cliched angsty poem, but then it goes off into comic territory at the end.
[7] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 1-Nov-02/2:42 AM | Reply
Yes this is pretty funny. Pizza always provokes turf wars
[10] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.120 | 1-Nov-02/6:54 AM | Reply
The other day, I grabbed the last of the veggie pizza by ninja-ing past some chick. I thought she was going to slay me.
[8] -=SeTTle=- @ 140.186.49.140 | 1-Nov-02/9:02 PM | Reply
You should have told her veggie pizza may make you less fat, but it still makes you fat (fattie).
[10] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.101 | 4-Nov-02/6:51 AM | Reply
Actually, I am somewhere between underweight and almost healthy, medically. size 1. you're fat, settle, or should I say: Count Chunkula, Rolls-Royce or Flabar the Elephant King.
[5] Tintagiles @ 198.164.238.88 > razorgrin | 5-Nov-02/11:13 AM | Reply
He's definitely fat between the ears, all right. And yes... you're close to medically underweight. I beat you there any day, though.
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