| Re: Ouch by heroditus |
23-Sep-02/6:15 AM |
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Yipe.Quite right. This is good advice to any young man.
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| Re: Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
23-Sep-02/6:22 AM |
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I like the suggestiveness of your imagery. There are so many possibilities for the mind to explore. I'm not so sure about the repeated refrain though.
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| Re: Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan |
23-Sep-02/7:05 AM |
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Whatever happens, men die...
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| Re: Summer Son by Frass |
23-Sep-02/7:35 AM |
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This is great poem to come across-you rarely find anything so straightforwardly celebratory. You can't help but want to join in!
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| Re: "to do" list:accomplished by razorgrin |
23-Sep-02/7:38 AM |
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This is either the 'to do' list of Slobodan Milosevic or my boss. Thank you for retrieving it.
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| Re: Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer |
24-Sep-02/1:08 AM |
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This is certainly a tangle beyond my limited comprehension. Somehow the pronouns evoke this confusion, but I agree that it could be a bit clearer. Nonetheless, I like this, a slice of (thankfully for me) someone else's.
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24-Sep-02/5:21 AM |
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That last stanza does sound great. This is very musical.
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24-Sep-02/5:25 AM |
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I have to admit I've never seen bees doing that either, so I was a bit put off by the last line. Also the first line strikes me as too easily strange - I sort of gathered you're not a fish - or is this some kind of astrological reference I don't get? I am a dense boy, I'm sorry. The rest of this I love, especially the second stanza when the realization of the horrible truth brings down your love of sea and earth, but in the lightest way possible.
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| Re: Unveiled by aperfecttool77 |
24-Sep-02/7:27 AM |
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What an interesting discussion. I din't think it's impossible to write a poetry of internal discussion and bald statement as opposed to simile - GK CHesterton said that metaphor and simile were the antithesis of poetry, and the whole of Wordsworth's 15000 line 'Prelude' is a discussion with the self. However, it is difficult to write something so self-revealing and to make it really speak to others. It does require an absolutely iron grip on language.
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| Re: Taffy by knickytoy |
24-Sep-02/7:48 AM |
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I like your central image a lot, but I'm afraid I don't know what taffy is - like toffee maybe? Excuse my ignorance, I'm English... I like it though.
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| Re: winter every day (Don't bother reading this) by unknown |
24-Sep-02/7:54 AM |
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I wish I could lounge at the typewriter all day..some of us poor bastards have to work you know...you don't know how lucky you are...Well maybe you do. This is super. Top stuff.
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| Re: Taffy by knickytoy |
24-Sep-02/8:23 AM |
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But will someone explain taffy to me?
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| Re: Morning conflict by INTRANSIT |
24-Sep-02/8:27 AM |
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I usually take against archaisms, but 'thy urn' works a treat. This is epic yet domestic. Ace.
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24-Sep-02/8:42 AM |
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'skinny necks like dishrags' - that's brilliant.Only just noticed.
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| Re: At my grandmother's aging sight by vulcan |
24-Sep-02/8:55 AM |
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Haven't I voted on this before? I like your relation of human age to geological time at the end and the general fear of being old.
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25-Sep-02/1:42 AM |
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Well done. You are my leader. Lead on!
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| Re: M&Ms by knickytoy |
25-Sep-02/3:18 AM |
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You are some kind of sugar addict. I like the manic hunger of this
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| Re: glory bar realities by royalflesh |
25-Sep-02/3:20 AM |
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This is a real progression from your last poem on this theme - smashing. Bleak though.
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| Re: The Masonic Underling & the 33 degree by horus8 |
25-Sep-02/3:39 AM |
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Baffled by Royalflesh's comment, but thinking this poem is great
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| Re: Regime Change by Nicholas Jones |
25-Sep-02/3:44 AM |
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Did you hear hear Mr Blair banging on about 'regime change' on the news last night?
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