Re: On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee	unknown^user 128.196.6.126	12-May-05/8:49 AM
good imagery
Re: a comment on a way to pass time by unknown^user	unknown^user 128.196.6.126	12-May-05/7:59 AM
You're right. It's not really about anyone in particular. Is about a certain type of person at a certain time, but it happens to everyone. I am sorry that you're deprived of "Law & Order" though. In the US, it's always showing on at least one channel at almost any given moment. It's one of those shows that no one really likes, but they just watch, myself included.
Re: Covering the white house by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	11-May-05/6:09 PM
There's definitely a Fabulous Furried Freak Brothers charm here.
Re: My Random Girl by Miggy	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	11-May-05/5:57 PM
This better have an extreeeme catchy melody... Thanks for bringing the memory of The Turtles back. A very nice band from the era when boyz were still boys
Re: My Best Friend, 1985 by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	11-May-05/5:20 PM
I'm sure it reads fast for a reason but it also reads like a list. Take some 120 grit to it.
Re: Mid Years by Dovina	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	11-May-05/5:18 PM
I knew that. I'll be posting a beeg wun monday morning. Make sure you have a comic book in your shorts. It's gonna be Krrraken. I'm.....al...most.....home....erghk.
Re: a comment on Dying breed by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	11-May-05/5:10 PM
Shorter lines and more meat? You sound like my wife.
Re: Man Enough For Me by mystic enoch	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	11-May-05/5:04 PM
It's me! I'm here! Nope. My shoe's untied. I guess I'm disqualified.
Re: a comment on a 9,000.00$ Philippine script treatment by Shardik	Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.62.63	11-May-05/1:06 PM
The title says it's a script treatment, and it's classified in 'other' so, I guess the real question here is, can you fucking read,asshat?
Re: Mid Years by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/6:09 AM
I find relationships a more-certain way to have sex more often, and at minimal cost. Am I just that young?
Re: a comment on My Best Friend, 1985 by jessicazee	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/6:01 AM
She's American. And she does it so well.
Re: a comment on Gone Forever (in loving memory of a teacher) by Princess_Snowflake	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/6:00 AM
There's no question about that. But in my experience, sincerity has very little to do with great poetry. Most of your favorite poets are writing about things that haven't really happened, and making you think they did. And not only that they did happen, but that they happened to you.
Re: a comment on Strings by Fayt	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/5:39 AM
1) Oh. 2 & 3) Sorry. I wasn't trying to be hard on you. It's just that when you write a poem you need to make sure it makes sense and isn't just a bunch of random gobble that doesn't make any sense or seem in the least true. No, that's not true. When you write a poem for yourself you can write it however you want. You can even write it in poo. But when you write a poem and submit it for other people's approval and comments, you can either try to make it some way they'll like or you can put up with people saying they don't like it and why. The reason I didn't like this poem is it doesn't make sense and it doesn't have anything to do with my world (which isn't held together by strings but by Love and humankind's general need for social interaction.) There. You can take it or leave it. PS-I voted you a 10 in order to encourage you.
Re: a comment on Blinking by zodiac	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/5:26 AM
I don't think this would be a poem without the end. Sorry :-(
Re: a comment on Old Friend by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/5:25 AM
No, I'd like it better if it was written better. The first two lines, I mean. Here are some dog-related rhymes for 'pet' you could have used instead: fret, get, jet, let, met, set, sweat, vet, wet, yet, arquette, bassette, beget, beset, brunette, cornet, corvette, cossette, duet, forget, regret, rosette, roulette, tibet, upset, vignette, anisette, cigarette, flageolet, kitchenette, silhouette, sobriquet, tagamet, looks-rather-like-Cate-Blanchett, and so on. If I can make one small suggestion: Don't make practically all your lines non sequitors, especially not the first two. You're going to do a lot better saying, Then a happy healthy pet Until he ate my tagomet, than saying something like Then a happy healthy pet. What ever happened to John Larroquete? Just a suggestion anyway. Personally, I like it when you rhyme.
Re: a comment on Finding Gin and Santa by richa	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/5:00 AM
Yeah, but that's kind of the thing about being funny, isn't it? The thing about mocking, too.
Re: a 9,000.00$ Philippine script treatment by Shardik	zodiac 212.118.19.234	11-May-05/4:59 AM
This is excellent. I might possibly give head to see a good movie about Filipinos.
Re: Mid Years by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	11-May-05/4:05 AM
This is a very good piece. However I am concerned about your fascination with middle age, are you trying to make yourself feel happier about the onset of drooping and the ceasing of your monthlies?
Re: a comment on Go now if you want it. by Fayt	Fayt 66.217.137.136	11-May-05/3:49 AM
lol, but yeah i can see what you are saying with my other poem. I personally like the focus on one word, but, i can see it might be a good idea to take focus off a particular word.
Re: a comment on Returning by Dovina	Prince of Void 62.220.96.234	10-May-05/9:38 PM
may I have returned for thousands time may I have knocked the door of ageless heaven for thousands may I have kissed the princess in the dark gothic castle may I have reached enlightenment for once I have heard the name may I have known you may I have been in other side and opened the secret of creation all these" Mays " will be experienced soon and return to this time that I cant be sure of those "Mays" finally when will I return to myself ...myself I mean the love this is my ultimate returning ..Returning to the love