You're right. It's not really about anyone in particular. Is about a certain type of person at a certain time, but it happens to everyone. I am sorry that you're deprived of "Law & Order" though. In the US, it's always showing on at least one channel at almost any given moment. It's one of those shows that no one really likes, but they just watch, myself included.

Shorter lines and more meat? You sound like my wife.

The title says it's a script treatment, and it's classified in 'other' so, I guess the real question here is, can you fucking read,asshat?

She's American. And she does it so well.

There's no question about that. But in my experience, sincerity has very little to do with great poetry. Most of your favorite poets are writing about things that haven't really happened, and making you think they did. And not only that they did happen, but that they happened to you.

1) Oh. 2 & 3) Sorry. I wasn't trying to be hard on you. It's just that when you write a poem you need to make sure it makes sense and isn't just a bunch of random gobble that doesn't make any sense or seem in the least true. No, that's not true. When you write a poem for yourself you can write it however you want. You can even write it in poo. But when you write a poem and submit it for other people's approval and comments, you can either try to make it some way they'll like or you can put up with people saying they don't like it and why. The reason I didn't like this poem is it doesn't make sense and it doesn't have anything to do with my world (which isn't held together by strings but by Love and humankind's general need for social interaction.) There. You can take it or leave it. PS-I voted you a 10 in order to encourage you.

I don't think this would be a poem without the end. Sorry :-(

No, I'd like it better if it was written better. The first two lines, I mean. Here are some dog-related rhymes for 'pet' you could have used instead: fret, get, jet, let, met, set, sweat, vet, wet, yet, arquette, bassette, beget, beset, brunette, cornet, corvette, cossette, duet, forget, regret, rosette, roulette, tibet, upset, vignette, anisette, cigarette, flageolet, kitchenette, silhouette, sobriquet, tagamet, looks-rather-like-Cate-Blanchett, and so on. If I can make one small suggestion: Don't make practically all your lines non sequitors, especially not the first two. You're going to do a lot better saying, Then a happy healthy pet Until he ate my tagomet, than saying something like Then a happy healthy pet. What ever happened to John Larroquete? Just a suggestion anyway. Personally, I like it when you rhyme.

Yeah, but that's kind of the thing about being funny, isn't it? The thing about mocking, too.

lol, but yeah i can see what you are saying with my other poem. I personally like the focus on one word, but, i can see it might be a good idea to take focus off a particular word.

may I have returned for thousands time may I have knocked the door of ageless heaven for thousands may I have kissed the princess in the dark gothic castle may I have reached enlightenment for once I have heard the name may I have known you may I have been in other side and opened the secret of creation all these" Mays " will be experienced soon and return to this time that I cant be sure of those "Mays" finally when will I return to myself ...myself I mean the love this is my ultimate returning ..Returning to the love