some deleted user
on deliberate by shrutikay
2 Jun 2005, 4:18 PM
Slightly better than the rest, but
<< â¦. >>
is totally unnecessary.
I would prefer: 'of pink, mahogany and blue'; lubricates the reading.
<< Forlorn - a dark reality I fall... >> is a line that truly jars. If you really want to keep it (I guess you do) at least try to add two beats to the first line in this stanza to restore balance
this poem sucks balls but thanks for the rating u gave mine...u fucking whore...my poem was about my dad but i see that u dont even appretiat a simple poem out of tribute....
Dovina
on Adibe's Song (third-time's-the-charm revision, less Spanish) by zodiac
2 Jun 2005, 12:45 PM
Not knowing language or culture, I'd say she knotted her scarf, but can't see what she makes of it all.
Dovina
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
2 Jun 2005, 12:33 PM
I didn't write the question. It appeared in The Ladies Diary in the nineteenth century. Consider the language in use then when interpreting it. You, a math major, should do better than a mere uneducated lady who probably had to steal into her husband's office to use a log-trig book late at night.
Dovina
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
2 Jun 2005, 12:27 PM
Wrong.
submit this poem to sum online wedding site..they mite feature it in their journal..
Dovina
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
2 Jun 2005, 12:27 PM
You didn't answer the question, unless you mean by this: "No, but I can cheat."
If you'd just made a list, it would say as much, and as little.
funny coment there.....neways./..the poems..gud
well ritten...
nice poem
1) 9
2) 5
Not including the pleasure of analyzing.
I did not mean to complement her, but only to compliment her. It would have been clever worded differently. As it is â just a misspelling and a good call.
Who knows.
You drive us wild
we'll drive you crazy.
KISS
Um, the breach in the 5th is not. The sixth, yes. The best I can do is refer you to the "gold standard" of: Do not go gentle into that good night, By Dylan Thomas. Probably easy to find on the 'net. My newer one was far better. V's are one of those poems that look easy but aren't. I did a couple of hack Ghazals once. I'm bad at forms.
I mean, I see the form and the rhyme scheme, but is the breach in the last two stanza's typical villanelle? (my directory doesn't feature the term)