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Life and Love (Free verse) by windyone I sit outside listening to the sounds of the night.
The wind rustling the leaves in the trees,
the lonesome whistle of a train as it passes by.
I watch a spider slowly spinning its web near the light.
A symphony of dogs howling as they hear a siren in the distance,long
before it reaches my ear.
A doe and her fawn as they silently disappear into the meadow across the
road.
I long for the first rays of sunlight,when I shall return home and see
the sweet smiling face of my grandson as he slumbers in his crib,secure
in the comfort of our love.
Up the ladder:
thematic
Down the ladder:
Being
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Posted: May 30, 2005 2:00 PM PDT; Last modified: May 30, 2005 2:00 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7616 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 82.39.21.227
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30-May-05/4:20 PM
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A brave turd, but ultimately doomed. Last words: "I'm going to make it!"
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windyone @ 63.245.189.142
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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30-May-05/4:30 PM
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quite so..obviously an escapee
Seems unfinished. Not that you should just tell us the outcome or the backstory, but some clue please.
A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
Paul Valery
Amen.
Sorry, I don't buy symphony of dogs. The last line is a little too straightforward for me. Maybe a little backstory might be good like D says.
How sad....that everything needs to be analyzed...life is to be enjoyed
Even when poetry has a meaning, as it usually has, it may be inadvisable to draw it out... Perfect understanding will sometimes almost extinguish pleasure. A. E. Housman
And this blankets all people and all personalities? Some derive pleasure from investigating further, and, obviously you can take or leave all comments from us 'rankers.
whew! that's a relief! :-)
It's good as is, but could be better with just another clue on what you mean. Such clues, if subtle, do not stop a reder from taking it in another direction. I failed in this regard on my recent posting.
I agree. But for outsiders this poem is too tranquil.
Would you take the above a step farther and agree that, on average, the analyzing person leads a less pleasurable life than the non-analyzing person? Would you consider testing that notion?
***ZODIAC'S SIMPLE TEST*** 1) On a scale of 1-10, 1 being 'never' and 10 being 'constantly', how much of the time would you say you analyze things? 2) On a scale of 1-10, 1 being 'not at all pleasurable' and 10 being 'extremely pleasurable', how pleasurable would you say your life is? For my part, I promise to answer fairly.
LOL! ok you got me! 10 and 9 :-)
You drive us wild
we'll drive you crazy. KISS
1) 9
2) 5 Not including the pleasure of analyzing.
I don't think it makes any sense without the pleasure of analyzing included.
Ok and your test results are Zodiac? :-)
10 and 9.
I was at work...all my clients were asleep....first time I'd met my grandbaby......wanted to go home
Aye? Did some poop-deck crab pass gass agin me matey? Scallywags be prayin for the brownin in the mornin tiday.
typical popeye...Olive :-)
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