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Life and Love

Member since 2005 · Posted 30 May 2005 · 21 comments

I sit outside listening to the sounds of the night. The wind rustling the leaves in the trees, the lonesome whistle of a train as it passes by. I watch a spider slowly spinning its web near the light. A symphony of dogs howling as they hear a siren in the distance,long before it reaches my ear. A doe and her fawn as they silently disappear into the meadow across the road. I long for the first rays of sunlight,when I shall return home and see the sweet smiling face of my grandson as he slumbers in his crib,secure in the comfort of our love.

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21 comments

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 30-May-05/4:20 PM Reply

A brave turd, but ultimately doomed. Last words: "I'm going to make it!"

[n/a] windyone › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 30-May-05/4:30 PM Reply

quite so..obviously an escapee

[7] Dovina 30-May-05/6:04 PM Reply

Seems unfinished. Not that you should just tell us the outcome or the backstory, but some clue please.

[n/a] windyone › Dovina 30-May-05/8:51 PM Reply

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
Paul Valery

[7] INTRANSIT › windyone 31-May-05/7:23 AM Reply

Amen.

[7] INTRANSIT 31-May-05/7:25 AM Reply

Sorry, I don't buy symphony of dogs. The last line is a little too straightforward for me. Maybe a little backstory might be good like D says.

[n/a] windyone › INTRANSIT 31-May-05/7:58 AM Reply

How sad....that everything needs to be analyzed...life is to be enjoyed

Even when poetry has a meaning, as it usually has, it may be inadvisable to draw it out... Perfect understanding will sometimes almost extinguish pleasure.
A. E. Housman

[7] INTRANSIT › windyone 31-May-05/8:52 AM Reply

And this blankets all people and all personalities? Some derive pleasure from investigating further, and, obviously you can take or leave all comments from us 'rankers.

[n/a] windyone › INTRANSIT 31-May-05/9:08 AM Reply

whew! that's a relief! :-)

[7] Dovina › windyone 31-May-05/9:24 AM Reply

It's good as is, but could be better with just another clue on what you mean. Such clues, if subtle, do not stop a reder from taking it in another direction. I failed in this regard on my recent posting.

[n/a] deleted user › windyone 31-May-05/4:06 PM Reply

I agree. But for outsiders this poem is too tranquil.

[n/a] zodiac › windyone 1-Jun-05/9:51 PM Reply

Would you take the above a step farther and agree that, on average, the analyzing person leads a less pleasurable life than the non-analyzing person? Would you consider testing that notion?

***ZODIAC'S SIMPLE TEST***
1) On a scale of 1-10, 1 being 'never' and 10 being 'constantly', how much of the time would you say you analyze things?

2) On a scale of 1-10, 1 being 'not at all pleasurable' and 10 being 'extremely pleasurable', how pleasurable would you say your life is?

For my part, I promise to answer fairly.

[n/a] windyone › zodiac 2-Jun-05/2:40 AM Reply

LOL! ok you got me! 10 and 9 :-)

[7] INTRANSIT › windyone 2-Jun-05/7:19 AM Reply

You drive us wild
we'll drive you crazy.
KISS

[7] Dovina › zodiac 2-Jun-05/11:38 AM Reply

1) 9
2) 5
Not including the pleasure of analyzing.

[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 3-Jun-05/5:36 AM Reply

I don't think it makes any sense without the pleasure of analyzing included.

[n/a] windyone › zodiac 2-Jun-05/4:30 PM Reply

Ok and your test results are Zodiac? :-)

[n/a] zodiac › windyone 3-Jun-05/5:45 AM Reply

10 and 9.

[n/a] windyone 31-May-05/9:32 AM Reply

I was at work...all my clients were asleep....first time I'd met my grandbaby......wanted to go home

[3] Don-Quixote 4-Jun-05/12:32 PM Reply

Aye? Did some poop-deck crab pass gass agin me matey? Scallywags be prayin for the brownin in the mornin tiday.

[n/a] windyone › Don-Quixote 9-Jun-05/7:09 AM Reply

typical popeye...Olive :-)