INTRANSIT
replying on Truckers should not be poets by INTRANSIT
2 Jun 2005, 6:15 AM
I have no Idea. Yet.
Zo I love this poem.
I love the change of heart, I knew there was another
side of you that was senitive
As a youth idolising your father often turns to hate or contempt in later years, which makes for far more interesting poems. But often is not always and this is a nice and gentle tribute.
Script kiddies are today's ultimate brats. You would be surprised to know how many are over age. Like this one; an online coward and a failure in bed, as the words disclose.
"...Ernie! You're not downloading bathing young boys again, do you? Now hurry, or we'll miss mass!"
"Yes dear, I'm cummin', dear."
Please consider making the following revisions:
standing => squatting,
basking => bisqueing,
buttons => buttocks,
Captain, Doctor... Father => Master, Doctor?... Father?
The best part was where you described heaven as "heavenly" and hell as "hellish".
Please keep the picture of his beard.
LOL! ok you got me! 10 and 9 :-)
zodiac
replying on Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines by zodiac
1 Jun 2005, 10:07 PM
Well, the ending is her talking, the rest is the guy. Does that help? Or - I meant the part beginning with the second "My love" to be a different day.
For my part, yes, there was a change of heart. Right around the dress-doffing and kissing part.
zodiac
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
1 Jun 2005, 10:03 PM
What an astonishingly ladylike question you've picked for a rebuttal, though! "Just cover the bottom"? What the fuck does that mean?
zodiac
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
1 Jun 2005, 10:02 PM
In a frictionless world, zero.
PS-"complemented" is clever as it is, but are you sure you didn't mean "complimented"?
Oh.
Just out of curiosity, why didn't you have this experience when you were, like, 10?
I probably said that, actually. I was in a hurry typing.
Would you take the above a step farther and agree that, on average, the analyzing person leads a less pleasurable life than the non-analyzing person? Would you consider testing that notion?
***ZODIAC'S SIMPLE TEST***
1) On a scale of 1-10, 1 being 'never' and 10 being 'constantly', how much of the time would you say you analyze things?
2) On a scale of 1-10, 1 being 'not at all pleasurable' and 10 being 'extremely pleasurable', how pleasurable would you say your life is?
For my part, I promise to answer fairly.
What's a villanelle?
You know, I never consider about this before, not until you mentioned it. I guess it could be about looking for God. Ben Affleck is acceptable. But as the author, i would prefer God.
...Looking for God, perhaps?
Or Ben Affleck?
This is the best poem to have appeared on Poemranker since "The Huntsman's Secret".
Yours &c.
Henry Trumpington-Pigg
P.S. As you may have noticed, rockmage has a very bad case of AIDS, caused primarily by his excessive gayness.
Metrics, um, jiggle a bit...